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Can you evaluate my lyric and poem?..
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ssnobel64
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my lyric, "my past mistakes" verse1: from the bank of the river,i see the sun is going down and breezes come from far away to tell the story of own as the darkness comes,and as the sadness follows i am with my wounds,while the river flows chorus: my past mistakes now tore me apart Everyday is hard to live with a broken heart when shared moments seem like unforgivable crime I tried to reach her one more time, verse2: we were together before in this beautiful place the flowers,the trees are still in same place the rhythm of river still reminds our song the sunset memories so alive what went wrong? repeat chorus: Bridge: I hope someday this river would take me with her I hope someday these trees would tie me with her Its hard to heal the wound,which is so deep Its hard feel homebound,in a lifelong sleep repeat chorus: and my poem Lost Love after each long day when evenings came we met and felt the emotions same holding and heading towards the setting sun the waited moment in the hideout was so fun the greatest dreamers though tear in eyes we saw our hearts wider than all skies with the growing darkness we held each other oh! in the full moon,our midnights together she left the village and promised to come my life continued in the same old home i found her in the crowd, a queen to be oh! she never knew what happened to me Copyright ©2006 Chet
Lemon
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Awesome! :)
pearljam
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great job
nbk21ia
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A+++++++++++++++++++
bond_oo7
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Did you just went through BREAK UP dude!!!?? move On... man.. but well written... ;) .. may be she will get back with you.. hahahaha
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