you should take formal education on video editing and directing.
Just adding some jazzy startups and cool background music don't add up to anything. This video is not creative at all.
You made a joke of such a great singer. What is the theme of it? It doesn't even look like west bar and you added that music. When the singer speaks up, where is the sound effect, should have super imposed his voice and made it bold.

Lemme show you the difference between learned and unlearend. You are unlearned most probably still in college learning some video editings if not some youtube or some tuturials without practical knowledge.

Look at these guys below, jobless but yeah, they are learned masters in their field and yet have completed the video in just $700 dollars.
Take it positively, and do more creative things.