On the contrary, I think the cinematography and edit was done well enough.

I like the flow, but I'd question the vocalist ability to sing it well. The lyrics also seems a little mundane.

Also, could there be a little more Nepaleseness? For a second I thought both were reggaeton stars.The girl looked clearly out of sorts, and her mannerisms were highly affected or perhaps coerced.

Overall a fair effort, there are ample opportunities for improvement.