PNepali,

Though I have written a few pieces I wouldn't consider myself an authority on writing...but I think your writing skills are way above average. I really like this piece. It is obvious that you know this subject matter quite well. The story flows naturally. Very beautifully done.

Would you be open if I pointed a few things out about the story that might improve it? I think this story is good enough that you could send for publication. May I recommend a place for publication?