Dynamite, you are the bomb!

Great writing. Wish you wrote more.

It seems that Akrit is a little obsessive and compulsive. A bit controlling. Big heart, but narrow minded. In many ways he is interpreting Deepa's actions in America from the culture in Kathmandu. That is always a recipe for disaster.

Going through shocking events makes us return back to our roots. It seems like Akrit has a huge shift in identity and how he views himself after his break up. I liked all that. He thought he was independent of his family and had his own 'liberal identity.' And he may have been liberal from a Kathmandu viewpoint, but he was still too conservative for America. And he goes from being independent to going back to get support from his family and his Thakuri identity once Deepa breaks his heart.

I liked how you build up the story, but I think you rushed him coming back to his Thakuri identity. I think this was depicted too quickly in the story. You build up the romance and the events. Actually, reading the story, I think you made the friend--Samrat, a little too close. The thought had crossed my mind above about Samrat 'taking care of Deepa' when you talked about how he could 'completely trust Samrat.'