another good story but i like the circuit city better cuz even though this story is original something in it makes it story that we have heard hundreds time and in the middle you have used the word "believe" a lot so try to use synonyms instead. cuz my english teacher always makes me use synonyms. according to em if you use the same word again and again it makes it boring for the reader.. i just spoted that word frequently in the middle. there might be others but keep em coming... now i find a reason to visit sajha daily .. thx bro..