Posted by: Juggy August 21, 2008
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Deep here is my honest analysis.
I liked the flow of the story. How it goes from handigaon to USA and ends up where it is now. But there is some disconnection between US and Nepal; I mean how they departed when they loved each other so much. I usually like the open end stories from you in which you allow people to imagine what the end will be. but this was kind of open middle story of yours; maybe new experiment kind, but then again it was difficult to find what happened in between there. I would have liked to know what happened in between. You stopped the story in the Handigaon when Bange left you smoking in that galli; and from that I would like to connect story like how Khsitiz found you smoking ciggarate there and misunderstanding grew between you ultimately ending relationship, but then again the deep feelings you show between you and Kshitiz doesn't let me believe in that story. I am sure there are more than me who wants to know what happened in between.
For rest of story, nobody can beat you in selection of words and explanation of the events. You win hands down on any story teller; and you are totaly world class on them. I read a lot; and when i say lot I mean lot, and you are among few of writers who put image in my mind, with the words, sentences and events.
Thanks for providing such a world class story Deep; and surely I would love to see you published, I would buy your book- hard bound edition, whenever it is published, just let me know; And yeah I would want your signature on it.
P.S.- It would be nice to read what bange is doing in his padoo these days!!
I liked the flow of the story. How it goes from handigaon to USA and ends up where it is now. But there is some disconnection between US and Nepal; I mean how they departed when they loved each other so much. I usually like the open end stories from you in which you allow people to imagine what the end will be. but this was kind of open middle story of yours; maybe new experiment kind, but then again it was difficult to find what happened in between there. I would have liked to know what happened in between. You stopped the story in the Handigaon when Bange left you smoking in that galli; and from that I would like to connect story like how Khsitiz found you smoking ciggarate there and misunderstanding grew between you ultimately ending relationship, but then again the deep feelings you show between you and Kshitiz doesn't let me believe in that story. I am sure there are more than me who wants to know what happened in between.
For rest of story, nobody can beat you in selection of words and explanation of the events. You win hands down on any story teller; and you are totaly world class on them. I read a lot; and when i say lot I mean lot, and you are among few of writers who put image in my mind, with the words, sentences and events.
Thanks for providing such a world class story Deep; and surely I would love to see you published, I would buy your book- hard bound edition, whenever it is published, just let me know; And yeah I would want your signature on it.
P.S.- It would be nice to read what bange is doing in his padoo these days!!