Fuchche,

I think you are writing every story seriously and with full effort. If you are writing just to spend your leisure time and make some fun, dont read further but if you really want a appreciation on your artwork, I hope you will not ignore my post.

You have great feelings while writing the story. I like the words you narrate though you dont emphasize on the incidents. Your previous one was at its best.

I salute your creativity. But wait, I have few suggestions as well as you are not getting more appreciation as you are writing.

- Try to make little bit longer part (dont try to resemble with your name:)

- Read twice after you post the story and make it attractive through paragraph and word editing (learn from CL on this matter, she is good writer, IMO)

- Try to follow your reader's comment, They are your 'guru' and never ignore them.

And lastly dont forget to write the lines like those:

मान्छे रातमा ,अँध्यारोमा जति खूल्छ त्यति प्रकाशमा खुल्न सक्दैन मेरो बुझाईमाँ ,प्रकाश उद्विग्न हुन्छ जस्ले सपनाको जग पखालेर लान्छ त्यहि भएर सपना जहिल्यै रातमाँ देखिन्छ । भावनाको आँगन ,कल्पनाको बँगैचा जहिल्यै अँध्यारोमा गोडमेल हुन्छ ।

Impressed by your tiredless efforts

Stat