Sorry guys I don't know how to write in Nepali....

But wow! This is great! What a wonderful style!

Some reservations I have:

राँडको थुतुनो जसरी हात पनि चले त बेलैमा खान पाईन्थ्यो होला नी भात पनि

राँडीलाई पनि थुम्के धारो छोडेर यतैको धाराँ गाडछन सधैं

1. Explicit use of an offensive word. The writer could have given the "feel" of it without actually "spelling it out".

But even when Bagmati is so polluted what to expect?

2. Discrepancy:

"Tek Bahadur" has a "Bahadur" in the middle.That means he is a Chettri (at the least not a bahun) In the eastern hilly reason, unless people fall in love and elope, a daughter of a so called "pundit" will not be given in an arrange marriage to somebody not of the same caste. Not trying to spread casteism here but just showing the reality. It would be great if that could happen. But we live in the present. Maybe after 10 years.

3. Teacher not a role model:(If I understood the ending correctly..if not my bad)

What teacher did was against the norms of an "Atithi". The poor family of Tek Bahadur let the teacher enjoy the room and board there even when they were in such a dire situation after Tek bahadur had the accident. But the teacher repaid them by having relation with their daughter.

Writing style of Deep amazing!!!