It is nicely written, but intensely dramatized. I personnaly do not believe some one could grow that isolated...... esp the line where you depicted that he pulls his hand when his mother touches. i think that is an extreme emotion.....which is only imaginable, can never be a reality...no matter what. kunai pani manchhe yeti sambednabihin hunai saktaina...that is not human nature at all.

good writing though!