Deep Dai, I have read most of your previous stories and no doubt that you are one of the best writers in Sajha. But, regarding this story, I think you have become unable to convince the readers of its flow. It sounds too personal otherwise self-important for readers to grasp the possibility of such occurances. कथाको सार त ब्यक्तिगत भोगाइले मात्र था' हुने गरि लेखिया जस्तो लाग्यो। सबिस्तार घटनाहरुको बर्णन नगरुन्जेल को सहि को गलत भन्ने अब। regards, Kevin.