Wholesale, wtf? So why don't you post yours, Mr. smartazz?? The dude here gets an A for EFFORT as it apparantly is his first time delving into the finer art of composing stories and instead of criticising him in that manner, you could let him know where he falters and any remedies possible for his ailing work of art (in your viewpoint). Constructive criticism is whats needed instead of negativity that I've been seeing in all your posts around sajha. BTW, why don't you write yours before you make such a harsh judgement on something that has someone else's much dedicated effort and time spent. If you ain't got talent yourself, who are you to comment on the ones who have? Damn, you're a friggin riot!!