Posted by: John_Galt June 14, 2007
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Grace,
Great effort, very imaginative, however, I wished you wrote a little longer. Introduce conversations, add more spice. Further, when I went through your writing again, I discovered the same mistake I had done eons ago, not quite getting the point across in the quest of building good verbiage. Write simple and be precise.
Just a simple suggestion from a person who has walked this road earlier. Hopefully you would pardon my interference.