Amber: Finally I could read a complete story from you. I still have not got a chance to read few "to be continued..." ones. No doubt, Your writing is cohesive, detailed and mesmerizing. Its too good for just the third attempt. But I have a criticism. I found the ending hollow. The details in the beginning gives an impression that the plot is developing well. All of a sudden you rushed to end the story.Seems like the story was written in two sittings. Part II in a rush though. How bout coming with a complete story and posting all at once. Anyways you are definitely working to be a mature story writer. Keep it up.