Samiksa This is one of the best poetry I have read in Sajha yet. So I am going to critique your poem very briefly. Since I am at the very biginning stage and learning to critique, don’t take my words fully. 1. Idea: Idea is good. It could be out of your experience (reality) or of some one you know. This is very realistic and may resemble some ones life. If you can modify or edit a little bit it can also fit into the context of Nepal. Sort of love and hate relationship. I hope it is not a “confessional poetry”. 2. Style: Your style is good. You developed the plot pretty well and ended where it matters. The incidents are well described. Your poem is a “free verse” so I did not except any “meters”. 3. Flow: Flow is good except I felt some bumps in the third paragraph’s last line. 4. Choice of words: You seem to have pretty good grasp and sense of Nepali language. Your choice of vocabulary/words are good enough to describe/express and is not “wordiness”. What if you wrote “देख्नु” instead of “सुन्नु”. This way you would have distinguished between हेर्नु and देख्नु ! Just a thought. 5. Rhyme: No end rhymes except one para. Its totally fine but I see a potential of creating rhythmical and metrical poems in you. At last, no poems are perfect so keep trying.