Posted by: Nepe July 21, 2005
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Two quick suggestions
1. Make कहाँबाट a part of Radif by placing it after Qafiya. Reads better
2. I will be tempted to convert the whole ghazal into one with a short meter like your 'पिटिएर सुन भईनँ' . Will be an interesting exercize.