Posted by: IndisGuise January 20, 2005
A thing
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"tonight I wish for the stars to shine so I know you are mine." ---------------------------- I think if u had ended it here, it would be more powerful. This stanza is beautifully composed and has a subtle yet obvious meaning. The last line makes it WAYYYY too obvious and makes a poem looks like a desperate (loud). Just my two cents. Keep writing. I kindda stopped long tyam back :( Indisguise:(
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