Nepe sir, swasti gare hai maile. I am glad that you stopped by. I am pleased to note your comment. I agree with you that I need a lot of improvements in my writing to call myself a writer. Let's address your points with due respect. Let me begin with saying that the peice was written fairly quickly, say within 30 minutes, without paying too much attention to the plot or technicality of the writing. The above statement, however, should not be considered as an excuse for a weak presentation though. I accept full responsibility for my writings, however good/bad they are. "The major weakness, or call it a room for improvement, is to ignore to expose or rather to confuse the quality of the relationship between Rakesh and Rachel." I thought whatever I exposed regarding the relationship between Rakesh, and Rachel was enough to conclude a story (if it is qualified to be called so) in one post (6500 characters). You have brought a good point regarding the "quality of relationship between Rakesh and Rachel". Respecting the magnitude of a concept such as "quality of relationship", what I would like to say about that is if you look at the writer, he sounds like a psudoRakesh (this is important for readers to acknowledge this fact). The writer does not talk much about Rachel. Rakesh himself never analyzed the quality of his relationship or the essence of it with Rachel. Rachel loved Rakesh for love. Flow of love followed this pattern : Rachel to Rakesh to Rachana to .... (this part I did not talk about). "जान्ने हुन खोज्या क्या ? " I appreciate the fact.