[Show all top banners]

rahulvai
Replies to this thread:

More by rahulvai
What people are reading
Subscribers
:: Subscribe
Back to: Stories / Essays / Literature Refresh page to view new replies
 The Red Paradox
[VIEWED 7063 TIMES]
SAVE! for ease of future access.
Posted on 03-11-13 11:35 AM     [Snapshot: 59]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     1       ?         Liked by
 

 अंग्रेजीका क्लिष्ट शब्दहरु बीच नेपालीमा उत्कृष्ट लेखाइले भन्दा पनि कथाको गहिराइ र यथार्थ प्रस्तुति ले मन छोयो... 
 

 
Posted on 03-11-13 11:39 AM     [Snapshot: 68]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 Shades of "Palpasa Cafe" in this...
 
Posted on 03-11-13 11:41 AM     [Snapshot: 98]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

Bitter truth of Nepal....

 
Posted on 03-11-13 12:10 PM     [Snapshot: 161]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

Lots of young adults can relate this story. Parents coering their sons to pick spouse.

 
Posted on 03-11-13 12:12 PM     [Snapshot: 119]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 Nice story.A vivid picture of Nepalese polarised lifestyles after the conflict and the awesome burden of family ties at times.Good blend of Nepali and English makes it more engaging and perceptible and btw it takes 17 hrs to fly from LAX to Bangkok.
 
Posted on 03-11-13 2:24 PM     [Snapshot: 292]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 
 
Posted on 03-11-13 4:26 PM     [Snapshot: 355]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     1       ?         Liked by
 

Anne,

What didn't surprise me was how well the story was weaved, considering how well you write, that was always given, what surprised me was your bilingual proficiency. Most of us do not speak Nepali well, let alone write it, in the wake of that, not only did you well in Nepali, but you also did it almost flawlessly. That alone is not the case, what amazes me more is your sending a point across when you blended both languages. That is a gift. 

Also, that came as a big slap on a face of people like me who do not write in Nepali. I am ashamed that I do not write in Nepali because I am simply lazy. Typing in devanagiri when writing a story takes twice as much time and even more, and an impatient person that I am, I cannot simply handle the effort.

That also should be a big slap on faces of people who claim they write in English because their Nepali is not good. Seriously, that statement is as flawed as Jesus walking on water.

Not trying to go overboard, but if a dude straight out of Little Angels (just an example, not stereotyping all students) speaks like this -

मेरो गर्लफ्रेन्ड क्या च्वांक छ यार

Instead of

मेरी गर्लफ्रेन्ड क्या च्वांक छे यार

And claims  यो मन त मेरो नेपाली हो, I see both my middle fingers going up involuntarily.

P.S - I do not know who you are, but I am already jealous of your boyfriend. :)

 
Posted on 03-11-13 11:57 PM     [Snapshot: 494]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 wow.........speechless
 
Posted on 03-12-13 4:52 PM     [Snapshot: 634]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

Thuldai, man paraidinu bhaeko ma dhanyabaad. Nepali ma nalekheko 8 barsha bhaecha, tei pani ali ali koshish gareko thiye.

Riddle, I'm humbled. I don't think my amateur piece and a literary masterpiece like Palpasa Cafe are even comparable, but I am glad you liked it.

Thank you serial, vasu, Awara, and junkyfunky.

Behoove, thank you for the nice words. Its always nice to hear encouraging words from great writers like you. I had been struggling with Nepali for a while myself. As I started this piece, I started to "think" in Nepali, and then write down my lines in English (unlike my other pieces where I think and write in English). Somehow, that process wasn't doing justice to the lines, say, a Nepali mother speaking in English in a village near Ambu Khaireni would look hilariously awkward. It was an amateur effort, and I am glad you liked it. Amen to your thoughts on them "patriots" as well!

Adventurer, thanks! I've noticed that you have been very encouraging to several writers on sajha. Admirers like you enthuse us writers to come back and write more. Thank you!



 
Posted on 03-13-13 9:35 AM     [Snapshot: 742]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 We had this discussion with Rahulvai long time back about how stories should be and how they should not be. I think the stories we can relate to rings the bell to us rather than the ones which are written in more complex literary language and yet we can not relate anything at all. You have got the skill to keep it simple without losing the details and bring a complexity in a story. I would love to see more stories of this par. Cheers.
 
Posted on 03-14-13 9:37 AM     [Snapshot: 838]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

Thanks Juggy! Also, I have to say this here- Juggy was the one who picked out "The Red Paradox" as the title ( I had something lame ealier)- thank you again!

 
Posted on 03-14-13 4:46 PM     [Snapshot: 921]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 Love your story. Amazing as always :)
 
Posted on 03-20-13 4:36 PM     [Snapshot: 1063]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

I have to be honest. Like, but not बिछिट्टै like. But then again, it's a short short, and it's better than some of the others.

 
Posted on 03-21-13 11:44 AM     [Snapshot: 1147]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

Thank you nitisa, I am glad you liked it.

Poonte, I always appreciate genuine and honest comments. I am not content with this piece myself, and I feel like I could have added much more to the storyline. It was an attempt to write in Nepali (which I haven't done in years), and somehow it took away from the story as I tried to incorporate two languages. Thanks a bunch for your honest opinion though - I can't stress how much I appreciate it.



 
Posted on 03-21-13 7:58 PM     [Snapshot: 1211]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 Dear anne, this is my third time reading this story. Don't have much to say because words cant articulate your talent. Just wanted to say good job as always and keep on writing. Unlike behovee, i'm jealous too, not with your boyfriend but with your writing. 
 
Posted on 03-27-13 12:21 PM     [Snapshot: 1312]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 Anne,

I read your story while I was in Nepal, and re-read today again. I loved your biligual writing skill, as always loved your creation. Ajhai aru padhna paaun. 

- Thaney

 
Posted on 03-29-13 11:58 AM     [Snapshot: 1395]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

Thanks a bunch KB and Thane! Really appreciate your kind words - as always!



 
Posted on 05-21-13 8:13 PM     [Snapshot: 1654]     Reply [Subscribe]
Login in to Rate this Post:     0       ?        
 

 Your story scared me. The Nepali dialogues you have used have an uncanny resemblance with my family  conversation back home. I was  immediately transported to my childhood days in my hometown. Your choice of nepali names- muda, pirka etc among free flowing yet authentic nepali dialogue is spot on and remarkable. Through your story, I was able to visit home for 10 minutes, vicariously. thankyou.
 


Please Log in! to be able to reply! If you don't have a login, please register here.

YOU CAN ALSO



IN ORDER TO POST!




Within last 365 days
Recommended Popular Threads Controvertial Threads
TRUMP 2016!!! Here is why?
महानियिका प्रियंका कार्कीजीलाइ खुल्ला पत्र !
Why you can't trust the vaccines 100%
How long does it take to get I485 approved?
Divorce Law in Nepal.
कोमल ओलि र धिरेन्द्र बिचको अफेयर
Anyone renewed their passport through DC embassy lately?
भाउजु आउनु भाकी छिन रे नि !
Wedding Costs in Nepal ? Party, Band Baaja !!!!???
~चौतारी १९९~
Returning to Nepal
पिन्कुको नया काले हस्पि नाक चुचेय भाते भतुवा
Gemstones in Nepal
Nepali Billionaires & Millionaires
TPS FEDERAL NOTICE
प्रियंका कार्की फोटो अबलम भाग २ , ३ जून २०१६ copyright @पुन्टर
360 Nepalese Professors in the US Colleges and Universities
Don't apply Canada Immigration through COLIN R. SINGER
होलीको नाममा यस्तो अश्लिलता देखियो
Udus killer spray
Don't apply Canada Immigration through COLIN R. SINGER
Funny jokes
Former U.S. President Bill Clinton in Nepal
Presidential rights to assassination rights?
Build the Wall-MAGA
Finally tps extended (18 months) ( full statement)
Why you can't trust the vaccines 100%
~चौतारी १९९~
महानियिका प्रियंका कार्कीजीलाइ खुल्ला पत्र !
TRUMP 2016!!! Here is why?
NOTE: The opinions here represent the opinions of the individual posters, and not of Sajha.com. It is not possible for sajha.com to monitor all the postings, since sajha.com merely seeks to provide a cyber location for discussing ideas and concerns related to Nepal and the Nepalis. Please send an email to admin@sajha.com using a valid email address if you want any posting to be considered for deletion. Your request will be handled on a one to one basis. Sajha.com is a service please don't abuse it. - Thanks.

Sajha.com Privacy Policy

Like us in Facebook!

↑ Back to Top
free counters