why i am so lonely?
when i cant feel u near me..
may be its bcuz of this thing that keeps me believing

but what can it be?
this thing that makes me go crazy
it makes me feel bad
that i really breath so hard

it really makes me blue
especially when he is with u
i know i dont have the right to get him out of your sight

but plzzz receive this thing i'm offering
and hope its this you'll be giving
its 'love' what i m saying........

ehehe girls dont loose money in love well ur a guy u must know that isnt it... well i about freedom i totally agree but donno what are u trying to say in the third option... can u pllzzz write the word..... or if it's a vulgar word then leave it.......

Nooo no.. girly..its not vulgar.... all he wanted to write was--------->

C) Virginity.
But this should not be a biggie... afta all a guy also looses his :).

On the serious note,

It would be mah pleasure to help u out ( in whatever capacity.. but lemme just tell u one thing.. one can not be a GOOD poet, one either is or ain't)... What i meant by this is, when it comes from heart.. it almost alwys is a god poem :p... as long as one has heart, and i am sure u do.. u should do fine.:).. of course working on it would help u out with how u form and present ur stanzas.

Darn... lamo lecture bhayo..

IndisGuise:)

viginity ?????????????? awww he couldnt even write viginity aww there dont be shy hehe.... juss kidding... lol ofcourse i do have heart if i didnt then i would b most probably in heaven :P...... :P i dont really wanna be a gr8 poet.... i write poems cuz it makes me feel good but only when i m in the mood...

taliya taliya @ indisguise for his lecture... i thought lectures r boring but urs isnt that borning thats anyways for lecturing me hehe...

Kasam maile ta ahile ta kehi pani bujhina. Tara pani i take indi bros words and will try to work on that. Life ma first time poem lekheko yaar maile ta aasti class ko lagi. Malai ta kya ramro lagyo, class mate lai dekhako ta hasidi raako, tut bhanera. Kya bore. Ani tesh pachi arko pani lekhe, aafai lai haas utyo. Aafnu kabita padera. J hoos, creativity ko laagi grade aai halcha, aru ta j sukai hoos.