Posted by: Jahbless March 18, 2016
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tapai ko obesity ko article ramro lagyo tara pls tapai ko source nahalne bani chai ali sacchaunu paryo. eg(Obese women are 12 times...) someone must have done research?
ani tapai le opinion magnu bhako bhayera ali kati tyo obesity ko article lai sachaune prayass ma. aba article lekhu bhaneko sajha ma aayera pyachha bolnu jasto ta hoina. credibility hunu ta jaroori cha
left ma chai error (tapai ko) right ma suggestion (mero)
Error Suggestion
into in
Child The child, A child
into in
perils the perils
Majority The majority
also seem also seems
obesity but obesity, but
in at
present but present, but
long term effect a long term effect
Also there Also, there
seem seems
ani tapai ko article ma sadhai Nepal must/ Government must/ he must she must huncha.. Change nai garnu cha bhanne "I must" batai start garown na ki kaso?
tapai ko obesity ko article ramro lagyo tara pls tapai ko source nahalne bani chai ali sacchaunu paryo. eg(Obese women are 12 times...) someone must have done research?
ani tapai le opinion magnu bhako bhayera ali kati tyo obesity ko article lai sachaune prayass ma. aba article lekhu bhaneko sajha ma aayera pyachha bolnu jasto ta hoina. credibility hunu ta jaroori cha
left ma chai error (tapai ko) right ma suggestion (mero)
Error Suggestion
into in
Child The child, A child
into in
perils the perils
Majority The majority
also seem also seems
obesity but obesity, but
in at
present but present, but
long term effect a long term effect
Also there Also, there
seem seems
ani tapai ko article ma sadhai Nepal must/ Government must/ he must she must huncha.. Change nai garnu cha bhanne "I must" batai start garown na ki kaso?