I never thought you would write so well, keep up the good work :) 

for a person like me, if i find smth very repetitive and boring, i skip few lines and i had to do it couple of times-- i hope you'd take it as a contructive criticism but then it can just be me. I liked the part where you linked every part of the story without skipping it.. ( Few ppl do that) 

Keep writing!!

AT the end, u kept us wondering.. " what did she do to take care of his dirty little secret"..

Nice one!!