I read all the kudos about your story. Hope you won't mind my "cricitism."

As I was reading the story, it felt like the theme/subject of the story was chosen to garner more audience. The story is successful in doing so: I guess there's nothing wrong with that. The adult content is an integral part of the story, although the detail could've been spared but it is on the writer's discretion-again, no harm in that.

The twist of the story gives it a nice touch; however the ending is almost predictable.

Not a bad try. Keep them coming.