_____ - it was very pretty good for the first time. You actually improved in later posts.
Way to go. I concur with some other posters that sajha needs more than just one type of "katha", expression less and meter-less so called gazhals. 
But I donot concur with other posters who said you have to be good as writer "A" or your story should be good as book "B".  You should have told them, 'if I were a pro, why would I be posting in sajha, duh!!!'
-Mav