Posted by: khoikkhoik January 20, 2011
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hi blurmirror,
It was nice but I was really disappointed by the flow of story. After reading the first part i thought you have developed the characters pretty well, and the characters are quite different from each other. So I thought it will be completely nice story and have lots of nice moment about friendship and one-sided love.
As how the leading lady was submissive in nature, I guessed that it will be sad ending one (that is she will not have Vik on her life, but not as in above story). But I am surprised how the story has changed its pace. In first part, you have used complete part to describe farewell scene of Vik. And in second part you have summarized the stories of last 9 years, with also inclusion of few other characters.
I believe you had imagined basic personality of each character, but have not use it properly. In a part 1, as a reader I believe, there was just mutual infatuation between Vik and leading lady (sara??), but they have not expressed their feeling up to that point. So I would I was expecting the story, may be some light romantic moment about how they become a couple.
Yes why every character have some kind of cancer. Look Vipul (Vik younger brother) died from unknown reason, then Vik and now Sara ? May be I am so obsessed with story, I did some research I found that chance of survival of 5 years after leukemia is about 40 %. :(:(
Please take it as constructive criticism. I don’t belong to art and literature field but I love to read Nepali literature. Now days we cannot find good articles in sajha.
About other sajha writers
Somewheredowntheearrth is missing and it’s been a while I have not seen his article
Fucheketo – love his style how he describes each simple moment and his unconditional love to name “Sudha”. But sometimes he will take months to post the next part of story.
Krazy – I believe she is wonderful writer. But I don’t know why she always chooses some psychiatric cases on her stories. I think that’s the reason her popularity was NOT same as before, that’s what I think. These kind of story will always go top of my head. I loved her romantic comedy and chulbule adventure and i think her best was that story for which was compared to parizaat .
Deep, Masterni nani, deepika and others I don’t know where they have gone?
It seems that these days i have lot of free time
It was nice but I was really disappointed by the flow of story. After reading the first part i thought you have developed the characters pretty well, and the characters are quite different from each other. So I thought it will be completely nice story and have lots of nice moment about friendship and one-sided love.
As how the leading lady was submissive in nature, I guessed that it will be sad ending one (that is she will not have Vik on her life, but not as in above story). But I am surprised how the story has changed its pace. In first part, you have used complete part to describe farewell scene of Vik. And in second part you have summarized the stories of last 9 years, with also inclusion of few other characters.
I believe you had imagined basic personality of each character, but have not use it properly. In a part 1, as a reader I believe, there was just mutual infatuation between Vik and leading lady (sara??), but they have not expressed their feeling up to that point. So I would I was expecting the story, may be some light romantic moment about how they become a couple.
Yes why every character have some kind of cancer. Look Vipul (Vik younger brother) died from unknown reason, then Vik and now Sara ? May be I am so obsessed with story, I did some research I found that chance of survival of 5 years after leukemia is about 40 %. :(:(
Please take it as constructive criticism. I don’t belong to art and literature field but I love to read Nepali literature. Now days we cannot find good articles in sajha.
About other sajha writers
Somewheredowntheearrth is missing and it’s been a while I have not seen his article
Fucheketo – love his style how he describes each simple moment and his unconditional love to name “Sudha”. But sometimes he will take months to post the next part of story.
Krazy – I believe she is wonderful writer. But I don’t know why she always chooses some psychiatric cases on her stories. I think that’s the reason her popularity was NOT same as before, that’s what I think. These kind of story will always go top of my head. I loved her romantic comedy and chulbule adventure and i think her best was that story for which was compared to parizaat .
Deep, Masterni nani, deepika and others I don’t know where they have gone?
It seems that these days i have lot of free time
Last edited: 20-Jan-11 03:43 PM