....................and no matter what you deserve this. passionate, ambitious and very very intense piece indeed.

 a bit chaotic but fair share has been given to every character.that's the most challenging thing you have done in the story. i admire your "non-mainstreamness". however, add more dimensions to your characters, some of them are too static.it seems like they are cut and pasted puppets from somewhere else. a reader always wants to see the characters being conceived , born and  brought up in the story itself. your character constructions are a bit too mechanical, i would have preferred more biological making.

writing for oneself is the least selfish selfless thing one could do. what say you?
kudos dear doggie!