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 The lone stars: an unwritten story---Juggy!

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Posted on 03-01-07 8:08 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Well, Good old days seem to be back again!
And I would like to add my own contribution too; But I would like to request if you can be really patient, because I am not really a fluent writer and I do it only when my mood calls me in!! So I am putting this story as sequences!!
Every thursday: new part, That much I can promise!!and yeah it is a repost!!..:)

DISCLAIMER: यो केवल कल्पनामा आधारित कथा हो। यो कथामा उल्लेखित घटना कोहि कसैमा मेल खान गएमा त्यो संयोग मात्र हुनेछ। :)

The lone stars: an unwritten story

She clicked on the sign in button. There was only mail in her mailbox. Nobody had actually written to her in long time. It had been long time since she had talked intimately, or written intimately to anyone. Usually, it would be “just a hi” letter to friends, and she had become fed up of those kinds of mail; then she stopped writing to anyone. She was too busy and there were many other things to keep in track of than old friends. Sometimes, she would call one of friends, sometimes one of them would call, and that would just merely become hi, hello, what you are doing etc. etc.
She clicked on the Inbox sign; there was mail from someone whom she knew intimately, exactly after three years or so (she had lost track of time).
Quickly she clicked on to see the letter. The message began to unfold.
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Dear Smriti,
Had been long time, since we had kept in touch, 1364 days to be exact. I am somewhere else now, you must be somewhere, and I had always wished you would be much happier, at least more than me. I am just keeping up with myself.
After I left I didn’t find myself in need of anyone; maybe I had lost faith too, but I was keeping up with myself. It was then I met her, actually she came to meet me. She was charming, caring and knew what was inside me. I saw you in her, and I knew I was not doing right to her, but I loved her company. She loved me; and I was too much lonely then, I loved her back. I know I am not perfect for such a lovely girl, but this time I don’t want to lose love so precious. I am getting married next week.
I know I am kind of selfish to write something like this to you after such a long time, but I needed to talk with someone who knew me entirely; and I couldn’t think anyone else than you.
I hope you are lot happier, and at your best.
Love,
Aakash
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The turmoil began to unfold in her minds, she had still not forgotten him and reminiscences began to run vividly in her minds.
They had been friends for more than 7 years. They had known each other better than he/ she would know himself/herself, they were soul mate. It was him who thought of breaking the friendship and she hadn’t bothered to keep track of him. She was just like that, coolest as usual, and no loss was great loss for her, just life would go on. He had gone his own way and she her own.
She had seen him first in that coffee shop. She had seen him first with her old friend from school. After that she had met him at college.
“Hey we had met before, haven’t we??” he had come to her.
“Aan coffee shop ma Arun sanga bheteko hoina??” She had remembered.
“Yup, Tmi pani yehin padhne ho??” He had continued the conversation.
“Ho!!”
That day they had become friends formally.
Although they were from different faculties, there was some chemistry between them; they clicked as good friends pretty soon.

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Posted on 03-13-07 3:48 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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So Jolly ol Juggy is a writer too? Blimey..

Good going Jug - keep up the hard work. Enjoyed the story.
 
Posted on 03-13-07 5:05 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Hey SL, just dropped in to say Hi..Sorry Juggu..haven't seen u in Nautankiland lately..:)
 
Posted on 03-13-07 5:53 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Dear Juggy,
just a thought...you in the beginning of the post said that "yeah it is a repost"
....is it that you want to make us curious and want to hear our feedbacks thats why you make us wait before you post the next ?
..i kinda am confused
 
Posted on 03-13-07 5:55 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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...but with that said, your story certainly worths waiting though
...let the ball rolling
 
Posted on 03-13-07 8:24 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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'"That was all she needed; and he knew it without a word."

And still they have to speak out something which is even more obvious. Relation is so much unnecessarily complex.
 
Posted on 03-14-07 10:48 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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complexity in life makes things interesting dont' you think so?
 
Posted on 03-14-07 1:17 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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And sometimes miserable too.
 
Posted on 03-14-07 1:29 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Great going Juggy! Keep writing.
 
Posted on 03-15-07 3:26 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Thanking you all for your response!! I am more than petrified to stop writing this now..:P

And just a explanation to Born to rule!!
I had posted some of parts of this before, long time ago; and in between time I stopped because I had no time!Now I am rewriting it again with some change here and there and I will make sure to end it this time! So thats why the the line!!..:)
Now I hope everything is crystal clear!!..:D

One for today!!..:)

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They sat in the café. Hot fresh brewed black coffee was steaming and sweet smell rising through the air.
Silence persisted; and both didn’t say a word.
“Kati bajyo?” She asked the time.
“2: 32”
“Damn! I have presentation at 3!” She searched through her backpack.
And she could not find her diskette. She picked everything out of her bag: her little purse, her favorite notebook, her little brush, some chocolate wraps, a novel and some chocolates.
Red faced, red eyed she looked toward him.
“Lyayena?” He already knew she hadn’t bought something.
“It’s not there!” Red eyes became redder.
He stood up.
“Lets go.” That was all needed.
They ran toward college. He got his bike out and they rushed toward her home.
When they were back, they were just in time. The presentation was good and her face smiled again; He smiled along with her.
“Ma’m, they are waiting for you!” She was zapped back to reality: there was no one to be with her again.
She gathered her files and laptop; and the never ending day was on the way.
She came back to her desk again. She remembered his number by heart; only number she remembered. She wondered if it is the same number again or has it changed.
The phone was right there, she pulled phone toward her. She dialed the number: the phone began ringing at another end.
She put the phone down; she was confused as never before.
She stood over and looked outside her window. In the distance she could see could see the sky extending its limit and it ended at the horizon; was it the end of sky she was seeing or it didn’t ended there!! She sat there and saw a football ground in a distance ; thoughts drifting to the past.
They were sitting on the side bar in front of football ground that day. Group of friends enjoying the game of inter college tournament and enjoying the regular chit chats.
"Oyee tero k garne bichaar chha yaar yehan sakechhi!!!" He was asking Suresh.
"Khoi yaar maybe jagir khojchhu!!!”
"Malai ta tension bhaisakyo yaar..senior dai haaru halleko dekhera!!!.." Someone else added.
"Khoi yaar..pahila pass nai garaun na!!!" He had said.
"Yeuta kura bhan na, yeah sakechhi maybe we will be out of touch hola hai!!" Suresh added.
"Hya, saathi ni chhutchha ra!!" She had retaliated...
“Khoi tara pacchi office bhayechhi thaha hunchha...aani barsau paachi bhet hunchha ekchhoti aani visiting card adan pradan hunchha...ghaar pugechhi chhora lai diyinchha tyo visiting card aani chhora le k bhanchha tha chah tmiharulai...."25!!!!"..."
Aakash had cracked the joke that day.
A roar of laughter floated through the air.
The thoughts came back to present. She counted the number of friends from college years she was regularly in touch with; there were none, some of them, she had not even talked rather seen in ages. The talks were reality now, a bitter truth.

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To be continued!

Have a nice day ya all!!..:)
 
Posted on 03-15-07 6:24 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Can't wait for other episodes to be read! Nice plots Juggy. Btw, shall I have the pleasure to start the countdown, but hey do not drag it till eternity as I can only count upto few hundreds! ;-)

Here is the bookmark - 1.

Enjoyed it throughly. Good work again! :-)
 
Posted on 03-15-07 7:29 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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While in college , I never thought that I might talk to most of my college friends less than a dozen times in my post college life.
 
Posted on 03-16-07 12:34 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Posted on 03-16-07 9:51 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Posted on 03-16-07 10:19 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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really into it now. waiting to see what's coming next.
 
Posted on 03-16-07 10:44 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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hyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa juggy, katti break hanya?? I know u're busy, but it's getting shorter hai..Getting impatient because it's nice and want more k...
 
Posted on 03-22-07 7:12 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Juggy hajur,

hamro thau ma ta aja thursday sakina lagyo ta hae...."mahabharat" ayera saki sakyo ...hajur ko katha aune chahi ajai bela bhayeko chaina bhane?

yesto saro kuranu ta bhayena ni hae gathe
 
Posted on 03-22-07 8:45 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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wow getting shorter and shorter ho :-P

kidding kidding...

Great:-)
waiting and waiting..but i can wait :-D no pressure:-P
 
Posted on 03-23-07 12:59 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Juggy yesterday was thursday, today is friday u didnt post ur story .here i m still waiting :(
 
Posted on 03-23-07 1:01 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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because of spring break ...he has taken the time to go on a vacation with his someone someone hence there will be a short delay on this serious... Please be patient, he will be back in no time :-P
:-D
 
Posted on 03-23-07 1:04 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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cerine r u serious ? :((((((((((((((((((((((((((((
 



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