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 The lone stars: an unwritten story---Juggy!

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Posted on 03-01-07 8:08 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Well, Good old days seem to be back again!
And I would like to add my own contribution too; But I would like to request if you can be really patient, because I am not really a fluent writer and I do it only when my mood calls me in!! So I am putting this story as sequences!!
Every thursday: new part, That much I can promise!!and yeah it is a repost!!..:)

DISCLAIMER: यो केवल कल्पनामा आधारित कथा हो। यो कथामा उल्लेखित घटना कोहि कसैमा मेल खान गएमा त्यो संयोग मात्र हुनेछ। :)

The lone stars: an unwritten story

She clicked on the sign in button. There was only mail in her mailbox. Nobody had actually written to her in long time. It had been long time since she had talked intimately, or written intimately to anyone. Usually, it would be “just a hi” letter to friends, and she had become fed up of those kinds of mail; then she stopped writing to anyone. She was too busy and there were many other things to keep in track of than old friends. Sometimes, she would call one of friends, sometimes one of them would call, and that would just merely become hi, hello, what you are doing etc. etc.
She clicked on the Inbox sign; there was mail from someone whom she knew intimately, exactly after three years or so (she had lost track of time).
Quickly she clicked on to see the letter. The message began to unfold.
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Dear Smriti,
Had been long time, since we had kept in touch, 1364 days to be exact. I am somewhere else now, you must be somewhere, and I had always wished you would be much happier, at least more than me. I am just keeping up with myself.
After I left I didn’t find myself in need of anyone; maybe I had lost faith too, but I was keeping up with myself. It was then I met her, actually she came to meet me. She was charming, caring and knew what was inside me. I saw you in her, and I knew I was not doing right to her, but I loved her company. She loved me; and I was too much lonely then, I loved her back. I know I am not perfect for such a lovely girl, but this time I don’t want to lose love so precious. I am getting married next week.
I know I am kind of selfish to write something like this to you after such a long time, but I needed to talk with someone who knew me entirely; and I couldn’t think anyone else than you.
I hope you are lot happier, and at your best.
Love,
Aakash
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The turmoil began to unfold in her minds, she had still not forgotten him and reminiscences began to run vividly in her minds.
They had been friends for more than 7 years. They had known each other better than he/ she would know himself/herself, they were soul mate. It was him who thought of breaking the friendship and she hadn’t bothered to keep track of him. She was just like that, coolest as usual, and no loss was great loss for her, just life would go on. He had gone his own way and she her own.
She had seen him first in that coffee shop. She had seen him first with her old friend from school. After that she had met him at college.
“Hey we had met before, haven’t we??” he had come to her.
“Aan coffee shop ma Arun sanga bheteko hoina??” She had remembered.
“Yup, Tmi pani yehin padhne ho??” He had continued the conversation.
“Ho!!”
That day they had become friends formally.
Although they were from different faculties, there was some chemistry between them; they clicked as good friends pretty soon.

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Posted on 03-08-07 3:46 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Damn you Juggy!!!
this story sounds like it has all the making of a heart-wrenching tragic end :-(.....and darn it is making me to recollect another plot that i actually went through myself...hmmm...one of these days, i may write another story... :P

LooTe
 
Posted on 03-08-07 8:17 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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juggy ...so...so...u mean to say wat im thinkin most prob is right?nice!!!its not always i think right :oD hehe..

anyways i guess i shudnt bhak bhak too much and get out of here and like the rest of the ppl here..wait impatiently for u to update hehe..and well just hearing u say u will complete it kinda makes one feel kinda sukuun(hope i got the word right hehe)..bistari bistari lekha..make it long if u wanna(i got no problem with lengths ;oP hehe)..but yeah kinda look foward to the day when u finish this one too ;o)...

good day!:oD
 
Posted on 03-08-07 8:47 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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small big things to matter in life. YOU can feel the moment. more..... please..
 
Posted on 03-08-07 9:15 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Juggy - Gripping story and great art of fiction there, I must say! :-)

Hope to read the other episodes soon!
 
Posted on 03-08-07 10:44 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Good going Juggiekins! Cudnt you somehow stick em all together in one go though? Curious.
 
Posted on 03-09-07 12:43 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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uffffffffffffffff juggy
its even worse than kasauti zindagi ki or kahani ghar ghar ki..tooo short hau..
i shud start watching those serials again.eh?
we have zee tv,,thanks jesus hau:P
anyways i immensely enjoyed reading that part in friday morning,,thanks sweets
nice weeken ya'll
 
Posted on 03-09-07 12:46 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Good going Juggy dada,Can't wait until Thursday!!!
 
Posted on 03-09-07 3:53 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Kya yaar mula Juggy

Aru kunai nam payenau unkai nam rakhnu parchha.
Today I gonna be drowned.
:-(

Old memory.
Something never leave u alone.
 
Posted on 03-09-07 9:51 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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yeah me too
i am waiting...waiting and waiting...always... for naruto ...bleach ..now the unwritten story :-D

thursday thursday :-)

after the story is done then put up a sign that says "actors needed" :-D
 
Posted on 03-12-07 4:44 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Mappy,
Thanks!! And Best of luck for ya for everything!!..:)

Rahuldai,
It is honor to have another writer to commenting on my story!! Thanks!!

Npl2US, Hetterika broda, Uptowngal, Bideshi,SNDY bhauju, Lemon, Nepaliketa12345,Birkhe broda, Flippu, Angie sweets, Hi_nanu,(Sorry if I have missed some, I have double checked tho)..:S
It is honor to have such a big group of readers for me!! I really appreciate you reading my story; but with school and then work and final thesis going on, I really don't get much time to write story!! Plot is on my head, but it takes time to make it story!!:(
So sorry for making you all wait but I really can't help it..Hope You all will understand!!..:)

Loote Broda,
How about anoda story named: Love spoken and .... done..:P

Danny,
It is going to be long ride a kinda novellete here,and thanks for saying bistari bistari lekha..;oP

Audrey H.,
I ll post this in Blog too after I complete it, maybe it will be easier to read as whole there, I think there is no other way to stick it around..:)
And yeah It would be nice to read other stories from you for time being!!..:)

Sunnydev,
Each moments are treasured in own way hoina??..:D
Thanks for dropping by!!..:)

Namaskaar,
Sorry for making u drowned!!..:(
Sometimes its better to leave and treasure memories and get along with the present tho!!..:)

Ceruuuuuuuuu,
Yeah yeah!! Now I have found one heroni, I ll have to look for others to make my movie..:P

Okies here goes two for today!!..:)

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The movie had gone into intermission long before he even realized it has started. His mind was perplexed...rather intrigued by the memoirs coming back as the flashlights. He had never been so confused and disoriented when watching a movie. He looked around...just to see Anita watching the movie so calmly and so gracefully...He was disheartened, is he was doing alright…A twinge of guilt hitting right into his heart…Helpless by the situation…he rather began to focus on the movie.
The movie was an Indian version of Love actually which he had seen long time back but this one was with songs and dance numbers. The love scenes started with songs and dances and even ended with them.
“Hindi filmma geet aaunasath love parihalne bhaneko…yinihaaruko desha yestai hunchha ki kya ho… geet ma nai love, geet ma tragedy aani life finish ni geet ma…” He had once told Smriti.
“Tmilai man pardaina geet haaru??” She had asked.
“Mann ta parchha ni..But cassette ma sunda matra, not in movies…geet herne bhaye music videos chandai chha ni.”
“Well its about choices ni…”She always had this readymade dialogues…and yeah She was right…It was freedom of choices!
“Hey, film mann parena??” Anita must have noticed something.
“Hoina, these songs rather intrigues me…” He remarked…
“Okies, but its nice song ni hoina??” She loved that song…
“Yeah, but only when I listen in my CD player…not in movies..!!!” He replied.
Anita felt something different, and it was never like this before….But too afraid to ask. Maybe some other time!
The movie was heading for the same old hindi endings…A typical happily ever after film and yeah three hours of pure entertainments…Aakash’s choice had changed with time, but he took break from them for a while.
Coming back from the cinema, he passed by the college…young girls and guys playing basketball…His thought went back to his heydays again.
“Hey, tmi sports weekma bhaag naline??” Smriti had asked.
“Ma ta fan matra… Cricket khelna mann thyo but haven’t played it for while…so not anything…tmi ni??
“Well, Maybe I will play basketball!!” She was participating.

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The bike almost hit the car in front of it. He was zapped back into reality. He was baffled with his intuitions today, and was almost out of control of all the emotions filling him up today.
Smriti was 5 minutes late to her office. Never been late before though…and one day wouldn’t matter.
“Ma’m, we have meeting at 9 30 today.” Her secretary reminded her.
She had forgotten about this…almost…and she had left some notes for meeting back at home. “What the heck!!! Where is my mind wandering today!!” She was baffled.
She had limited time, yet she looked around to prepare some mighty quick...maybe she can!!!
And a flashback glimpsed into her memories.
It was her project presentation that day; and she had the sports week to attend. Hurrying with the works, she had finished the project just in time and had gone to attend the game.
Game was tough, opponents fierce; But She had managed well as a captain. Two years in a row as a captain and 3-1 record was not that bad. She could hear Akash cheering her up from time to time.
“Ah!! Friend indeed…always there!!!” She was happy as she could be to have him as a friend. He was always there whenever she needed a shoulder to lean on, but he was kind of different; disappearing once in while just into a thin air.
The final quarter was on!
The point margin was low. They were just gaining by 2 points.
But the opponents were holding them to score more, and attacking fiercely as well. They were defending at their best. The tall girl of their opponent was unmarked just outside three point line. Smriti cried out loud for her team mate to check her.
“Check… Check!!!” She cried as hard as she could; But it was too late.
The ball swished around. And there it went right into the basket…The whole court raised with surprise…half of them cheering for the opponents.
She looked at her watch. The time was ticking by. Only 35 seconds remaining. She looked around, and saw Aakash, still cheering her up…
“There is time still!” She didn’t want to lose.
She passed the ball to her second best scorer (her best scorer had called day off that day). But she was checked well, ball came back to her. She looked around and she thought to give it a try herself.
She gave a shot ball went right on the target…and swished around the rim of basket… and came OUT!!!....The game-ending whistle blew.
She stood there blank…and broken hearted!!
She could have won…tears were jerking down her cheek.
She felt a hand on her shoulders. He had come to console her and without a word he took her outside the court…That was all she needed; .and He knew it without a word.

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To be Continued..

Have a nice time ya all!!..:)
 
Posted on 03-12-07 5:18 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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What a punch! Great going Juggy! ;-)

Thanks for taking out time to fulfil our demand! Great work.
 
Posted on 03-12-07 10:03 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Smriti is a sore loser like me rahechha!:P
 
Posted on 03-13-07 12:05 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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now I am confused with smriti and anita :O :-S...who is who again ???? i am too tired to go thru all posts again...juggy raja, lau na help gara ta...ko chai ko ho bhana na mitra...
 
Posted on 03-13-07 9:17 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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anita ---fiance
smriti---girl he had a crush on
 
Posted on 03-13-07 9:17 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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nindra lagyo

where's more story :-P
 
Posted on 03-13-07 9:46 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Good going there juggu! do not have any problems to wait for a nice piece. and good luck with your final thesis!
 
Posted on 03-13-07 10:23 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Juggu,
U did it again hoina?? We'll have to wait again...but it's ok..can wait..nice one again..I'll read it again when you post it in the blog..Now I have to recap it every time I read it..:) Budeskaal lagya ho ki..:)
 
Posted on 03-13-07 10:25 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Good going, broda. When is the next plot coming ??
eagerly waiting to read..
yeh dil mange moreeeeeeee..
:-)
 
Posted on 03-13-07 12:55 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Again To be continue :( chiiiiiiiiiiii anyway Juggy as usual greattttttttttttttt. :D
 
Posted on 03-13-07 1:15 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Broda, Thanks for posting bonus one before thursday ;), great as usual, waiying for next!
 



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