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Posted on 01-11-12 2:29 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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God and Human: A fantasy

Commander:  Captain, after 10 light years in space, engine is showing the signs of wear and tear, we may need to build new engine for our spaceship

Captain: How long this engine will last?

Commander: Indicators show that we may need new engine after approximately one light year. Last time we needed new engine after travelling for nine light years. This engine served us well

Captain: Start scanning this part of the Universe, Let me know when we find planet/s containing Moblotungstaplaite (a rare alloy of Molybdenum, Tungsten and Platinum, presumed to be formed during the formation of universe, which when magnetized can hold antimatter).

Captain: First officer, if we are unable to find the Moblotungstaplite in approximately one light year’s time, we shall return to our planet using backup engines, please make arrangements for this.
First Officer: Aye Captain
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After travelling 0.65 light years …… debriefing in situation room

CaptainSITREP please (Situation Report)

Commander:  Captain long range radars show that there are two planets that most probably contain materials we need. We will be able to confirm it after 0.1 light years.

Captain:  Keep me updated

Commander:  Aye Captain
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After 0.1 light years… debriefing in situation room

Captain:  SITREP please

Commander: Captain, it is confirmed that two planets in nearby solar system contain the moblotungstaplite.

Captain: Scan for the atmosphere and life signs,

Commander: Our scanner shows that one of the planet have breathable nitrogen atmosphere containing about 75% of nitrogen 24% of oxygen, 0.3% of carbon dioxide and other traceable gases and lots of water.
Second planet is little bit smaller than this one, it has mild atmosphere, not enough breathable nitrogen but about 24% of oxygen and rest is helium.

Captain: Any intelligent life signs?

Commander: No Captain, the smaller planet  have only unicellular life signs, Bigger one shows  plenty of different life signs but no intelligent life signs.

Captain: First officer, prepare arrangements for landing. We shall land in bigger planet with breathable nitrogen.
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After landing…. briefing in situation room

Captain: First reconnaissance team will get out of the ship, make a security assessment then rest of us will go. Commander you will lead the reconnaissance team

Commander:  Aye Captain.

Commander completes the reconnaissance of the planet. Captain is holding the team meeting inside the ship

Captain:
Commander please debrief us about the planet

Commander: After completing the recon I have prepared few hundred slides about the planet.
The planet has nitrogen rich atmosphere good enough for us to breath. The planet is inhabited by wide range of animals and plants with different physical size but very primitive brain.

Science Officer: Unlike us the animals in planet use oxygen to convert food to energy. They eat complex food and using oxygen they breakdown it into simpler one.
Plants use oxygen, carbon dioxide and water to make food.  They use simple molecules like water, carbon dioxide and sunlight to produce complex molecule. This planet has enough moblotungstaplite to make at least 10 engines.
Commander winds up his presentation after showing all slides, photographs, video of the planets he has taken during the recon.

To Be Continued........

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 Wonderful sci-fi.
Just want to point out that light year is a measure of distance and not time. Sorry :)

1 light year = 9.4605284 × 1015 meters


Keep it up.
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Thanks for the reminder,
My intention was to say time taken to travel that much distance. For example after traveling for one light years means "after traveling that much distance.And off course it takes time to travel distance

 
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Behoove me,

It hasn't failed to garner attention. Nobody needs to be a rocket scientist to understand what he's talking about. Actually, it is this mundane plot that I dont find as appealing (don't get me wrong, the script is really good) But I am hoping, ,................there's a lot more interesting read to follow. Please continue:

For the writers, why don't you first finish the stories you're writing before you post. It is really annoying to read to be continued and not be able to read rest of the story for more than a week, months before it gets lost in oblivion. Even if you're posting in parts, please put together the whole story at the end. Just my thoughts!

 
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Snurp,
Maybe you are correct. ------‘s story might not be an absolute page turner (who’s is anyway?), but I like the structure of his story and the details he provided. And I’d personally want to laud his effort because writing, in general, is a difficult task, and writing well is even more difficult. In the wake of posts like ‘my boyfriend and viagra’ and ‘maobadi chor’, I find such posts far refreshing and knowledge inducing.
As far as sequels of posts go, I understand your frustration, especially when none of our works are as interesting that keeps readers at their toes waiting for the next part. However (again this is my personal opinion) not many would write to read an epic that are over ten pages long given little patience and time that they have. I personally always write my articles to the fullest, but break it down into certain parts just to make it short read every time readers visited. I have always debated on it, and now that you mentioned, could you kindly provide some insights how YOU as a reader prefer to read a post? 3 parts in installments for a 15 page long article or just one part that never seems to end?

 
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Behooove_me

Thanks for reading.Looks like mommentum is slow but that doesnt bother me. In northern hemisphere its cold.may be ppl are not ready for exciting red (wink wink). Yes I am a student of science. My job forces me to learn many fields within science and that includes Astronomy.

Snurp

I admit that  introduction may not be that blockbuster. But I promise, depending upon how you view the subjects included in the tilte,  more interesting read.

Here goes the second part

Continued from above...


After two days…. debriefing in situation room

Captain: What is the security situation? How aggressive are different life forms?

Commander:  Captain, the dinosaur types of animals which are all vegetarian in our planet are both carnivorous and herbivorous here. They are huge, fast and pose a great danger to us in this planet.

Captain: Science Officer, Study their role in the ecosystem of this planet. Analyze key points for survival for these creatures, and try to answer what if there is no dinosaur in this planet.
 
Science Officer: The work is already in progress captain. My analysis of physiology /biology of this group of animals show that the oxygen content of the atmosphere contributed a lot in the domination of this animal in this planet. In the same time because of high oxygen content animals which have very high probability of evolving into an intelligent life form have comparatively short life span.
Disappearance of dinosaur will have no adverse effect on the ecosystem of the planet. Once dinosaurs disappear there will be plenty of smaller carnivores which will be able to keep ecosystem in check and at the same time those smaller carnivorous wont pose a bigger security threat to us.

Captain: Suggest an easy way to end the domination of dinosaurs from this planet.

Science Officer: Captain, if somehow we are able to decrease the oxygen content of the atmosphere from 24% to 21 % these dinosaurs will die within a six months. They will be not able to take enough oxygen for their metabolism as well as other brain function.

Captain: What are the adverse effects on other life forms because of decreased oxygen content?

Science Officer: No Captain, in fact because of decrease amount of oxygen content may favor some life forms which have the capability of developing into intelligent life forms. Because of less oxygen these life forms may live longer and eventually may develop into an intelligent life form in this planet.

Captain: Is there any possibility of using these life forms for our mining purpose?

Science Officer: I think it is feasible Captain. We can improve their physical strength with some hormones without any adverse side effect.

Captain: Our hormones will work on them?

Science Officer: Most of the hormones will work on them Captain. They are also carbon life form like us, only difference is they use oxygen to produce energy, we use nitrogen. Hormones/ proteins are all made of carbon, nitrogen hydrogen oxygen. Except for energy production and emotion other mechanisms are comparable.

Captain: What is the life span of different life forms?

Science Officer: Six months to forty year’s Captain.

Captain: Any input, why they have short life span?

Science Officer: It is the oxygen which they use to produce energy Captain. During their metabolic process free radical of oxygen are formed at different stages. For them oxygen is both origin of life as well as origin of death. These free radicals corrode their vital organ Captain. Whereas in atmosphere of our planet there oxygen is only 10%, so not many free radicals, so our body organs are more stable then these life forms,  Captain.

Captain: Oh, I see. Have you explored different possibility of reducing the oxygen content from the atmosphere of this planet?

Science Officer: Captain there is an asteroid X2 coming towards this planet. At its present speed it will be nearest, approximately 500 thousands kilometer away from the planet in a months’ time. If we manage to hit the planet by that asteroid it may serve our purpose.

Captain: Have you analyzed the various effects of asteroid X2 hitting planet.

Science Officer: Our computer simulation indicates that the atmosphere will catch fire. The fire starts consuming the atmospheric oxygen. When the oxygen content of the atmosphere reaches 21% it will not be able to sustain the atmospheric fire and the fire will die down. In the end, a thin cloud of dust will formed above planet’s immediate atmosphere. We can use our proton beam to destroy the dust cloud.

Captain: What will planet look like and what will happen to different life forms?

Science Officer: All those bigger and heavier life forms which rely on greater intake of oxygen will die because of lack of enough oxygen in atmosphere.
Less intelligent life forms will not be able to protect themselves from the dust cloud which will be formed aftermath; most of them will also be wiped out. Survivors will be comparatively intelligent life forms, and animals for which 21% atmospheric oxygen is enough for producing energy.

Captain: One more thing.

Science Officer: Yes Captain.

Captain: Is it possible to modify these animals so that they can produce energy just using sun and atmospheric oxygen?

Science Officer: No Captain, it is not. We use nitrogen compounds for our energy source. Nitrogen is capable of forming energy rich chemicals in presence of sunlight. But oxygen is not capable of forming such energy rich compounds, therefore they needs external source of energy supply.

Captain: I see. How long will it takes us to change the path of the asteroid so that it will collide this planet?

Science Officer: It will take three months Captain. The atmospheric fire set up after the asteroid hit the planet will last almost a year. Then we can use our proton beam to clear the dust. In any case in two years time this planet will be good enough for mining moblotungstaplite.

Captain: Very well let’s start then, shall we?
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Orbital path of asteroid X2 was changed. It hit the planet, a fire broke into planet’s atmosphere, lasted for about a year. After fire died down there was a thin layer of dust covering the planet, which was cleared by the spaceship using proton beam.

After completion of the process the spaceship once again landed on earth.
…… debriefing in situation room

Captain: Science officer, SITREP

Science Officer: Captain, dinosaurs are gone. Our life tracker shows 10% of other smaller life signs are also gone.

Captain: What is the overall ecological status?

Science Officer: Planet should reach its original ecological point within 2 years but without dinosaurs off course.

Captain: When can we start mining, Commander?

Commander: We have located five different geographical points where there are enough moblotangstaplite. All of these points are inhabited by a monkey like life forms. We can train them; modify them to increase their physical strength. We can start this task within a week Captain, once the planet reaches its normal ecosystem.

Captain: Very well. Science officer what changes are you planning for these monkey like creatures to improve their strengths?

Science Officer: I am proposing following changes Captain. First of all we have communication problem with these creatures. They lack flexible vocal cord to produce varieties of sounds. At present they can produce only limited sets of sounds which is hindering language development. Once we genetically modify their vocal cords it will be able to produce unlimited number of sounds. This will help them develop their own language.  We can teach them communicable language.

Second, at present they use both, arms and legs for movement. This situation is hindering muscular movement of forearms, hind arms as well as legs. We need to modify that too, so that they start moving using only legs. This will increase their load bearing efficiency dramatically.

Third, we need to stop the development of flexible appendage to the torso, a tail like development. Once they start to walk with legs they do not need this tail like structure.
After this we can start training them for mining. We may need other minor modifications depending upon how they behave after first two genetic modifications.

Captain: Do we have to wait long for these modifications to complete?

Science Officer: No Captain. Vocal cord modification will take approximately six months and depending upon their brains reaction to it, they may be able to produce millions of sounds within a year and at that point we can teach them language.
We can make them walk only on legs within six months Captain. I have to modify our gene and protein corresponding to those genes and inject on them. Our gene will start replacing their gene and they will develop physical strengths in their legs. The process will even faster if we choose 1-2years old monkey.

Captain: This place will be our HQ. We will establish operation center in all five geographical locations. We will use shuttles to go to all five geographical locations where we can mine our compound of interest. Experiment will start tomorrow in all five locations.

Science Officer: Aye Captain

Captain: Commander could you make arrangement for transportation and other logistics to start experiment from tomorrow in all five geographical locations? Keep me posted of every development.

Commander: Aye Captain

To Be continued.................


 
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Some of us write good stories, some of us find items to criticize. I am doing the latter as I find that more entertaining.

____ Writing a science fiction could be tricky. You really have to have a good grasp of subject matter to handle it well. Like Cacophonyx pointed out, lightyears is a measure of distance not time, as many people confuse between them. I saw your justification but I don't know how you can justify this statement that you put: "We will be able to confirm it after 0.1 light years."

I know I am spoiling your otherwise interesting story here but if you don't mind I will present some facts that will invalidate your story:

1. Scientists say O2 content hasn’t varied too much and in fact it used to be lower than what it is today, not higher; because of too much CO2 and Nitrogen. Some even claim that it was rather around 15 % around Mesozoic era.
2. You say after O2 reaches 21% atmospheric fire dies down. Scientists claim that the atmosphere can sustain fire until 15% O2 which is a more conservative value than previously estimated (10%).

I am sure there are other fallacies (like how did they travel faster than light) there but I wanted to point out the non-obvious ones. This might help you get better on your stories, it sure helped me brush up my memories.

I know it’s just a fiction, but wouldn’t it be more interesting if it stays within the realm of possibility and valid assumptions? Anyway, I find the story interesting so please continue. I will try not to annoy you with facts again.

 
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Stiffer,

I dont mind constructive criticism. Regarding using light years  there are many explanation possible. My logic is

1. In our daily life we use distance  as a point of interest for example

"100 km pachi gadi ma tel halna parcha hai"
"200 km pachi ramro tham paincha lunch ko lagi "

Now what I am saying is

After travelling 0.1 light years (0.1* 10 trillion Km)  Means after travelling 1 trillion kilometer
I have used light years as distance not time ( but if you know the speed it is possible to know the time taken to travell)
 In my story  "Indicators show that we may need new engine after approximately one light year"  means they need new engine after travelling one trillion KM

Now, how much time they will take to travell one light year?  if they are travelling at the speed of light it will be one earth year, if they are travelling at double the speed of light it will be 6 earth months and if they are travelling at half the speed of light it will be two earth years.


Use of term "light year" doesnt mean that I am using them as time


Then Why I didnt use Kilometer and miles instead of light years ?

1. Kilometers and miles are  terms used by earthlings, they orignate on earth. It is not necessary that aligns also use same units to measure the distance.

2.Even the light year may have different distance for aligns.  why?


Light year is the distanc travelled by light in one earth year,  that is in 365 days. It is not necessary that  every planet revolves round  its sun in 365 days.
What if some planets completes one circle  around its sun? 
But for the aligns who came from the planet whose one year is equivalent to 400 earth days for them if they use the term "light year" it will be the distance travelled by light in 400 earth days not 365 days.

Likie subatomic particles, elemnst which are the fundamental unit in Universe light is also fundamental to this universe that is why I beleive they use distance travelled by light as a measurement of the distance and time.


I agree that my use of words "one light year’s time" and "after travelling for nine light years" might have created confusion. I should have rephrased those but at that time I was thinking "after travelling for 100 km means after approximately one hr.
regarding  your points (1)


That is one school of thought, another school of thought is earth was rather vocanic and lots of gas offing out of earths enterior and burning in the atmosphere. lots of volcanos were erupting and they were cunsuming atmospheric oxygen by burning trees etc. At that time space around earth was not that setteled so many samller asteroids were hitting earth they were also consuming oxygen. I do not know which school is right but later fitted my fiction thats why I used it.

Your point (2)
Yes many scientis say that. Many ppl question that by saying then why our atmosphere is not catching fire ? According to them at present we need continious supply of fule in order to creat fire. Once you stop supplying fuel filre slowly dies down. According to them, if the  oxygen content more than 24% then once you start fire ( in larger scale) there will be enough heat generated for for fire to continue.
here gain, I do not know which school of thought is correct but later suited to my fiction thats why I took it.

I will definitely use your comments to sharpen coming parts.
















 
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Continued from above......



After two years……… debriefing in situation room

 

Captain: SITREP please

Science Officer: Captain our experiments are complete success. All experimental animals are walking on legs. They have started to formulate pictures for their actions. Some communities have already developed hundreds of pictorial signs.

Captain: How they are interacting with other monkeys which are not genetically treated?

Science Officer: They have tried to distant themselves from those which were not treated. Those who are genetically treated are more organized. Some even have started to develop shelter against rain and winter. Genetically, they qualify for new species.

Science Officer: Captain I propose name “HUMAN” for these new species. Because these are developed by altering the protein Histidine, binding pattern of sugar Urasil in DNA, modification of their Mitochondria, by increasing the Anaerobic respiration center in their muscle and by storing all information about these modification in the Nuclei of their cell, so that these modification will be remembered in generations to come. There is no going back for these species now.

Captain: Sounds good to me.

Mining of moblotungstaplite started.

______________________________________________

After 5 years……. debriefing in situation room

 

Captain: SITREP please

Health and Safety Officer: Captain we have some health and safety issues with humans. As a side effect of the mutation we introduced, they are losing their body hair. Because of this we have noticed their skin is directly exposed to different chemicals causing skin damage.

Captain: (looks at science officer)

Science Officer: I have discussed this with my team Captain. Best option is to modify their skin so that it will be more resistant to the chemicals, secondly we should develop a body covering ensemble. Use of body covering ensemble will protect their skin from harsh chemicals.

Social Counselor: Captain I have noticed development of social structure within human species. We also need to increase the supply of energetic food. Their output much more  than intake, calorie wise.

Science Officer: Captain, we are already researching on organized cultivation of the plants which produce food these new species like. Only problem is we need more human to  perform the task. We need to convert more monkeys into human. Otherwise our mining operation will slow down.

Captain: Well, they are our work force, slow down mining activities and teach them about cultivation of plant and harvest, modify their skin and develop protecting ensemble to protect them from chemicals and other environmental exposure. If necessary alter more monkeys.

Science Officer: Captain it may take approximately one year.

Captain: Take your time. We have travelled 500 light years. One or two years will not affect our journey.

_____________________________________________

After one year…… debriefing in situation room

 

Captain: SITREP please

Science Officer: Cultivation of plants and its harvest went very well Captain. Also, we develop very good personal protection ensemble for humans’ Captain. But there is one problem.

Captain: What problem.

Health and Safety Officer: They don’t like to put it on Captain, they are resisting it

Captain: Year ago you also told me they perform copulation in open?

Health and Safety Officer: Yes they do Captain

Captain: Science Officer, I think they lack chemicals for sense of embarrassment or shyness. Could you engineer their glands to secrete some chemicals which gave them the sense of embracement or shyness?

Science Officer: It is possible Captain. But we have noticed that after losing their hair, their bran have grown bigger, a bigger brain is the indication of intelligence. We can use these humans for several tasks. I hope introduction of these chemicals won’t stop development of brain.

Captain: I agree with you, make those chemical short lived so that they won’t hamper the development of brain.

Science Officer: Aye Captain

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After one year: debriefing in situation room

Captain: SITREP please

Science Officer: This far, our entire endeavor has been successful Captain. Introduction of chemical for embracement has done a lot to them. Now they wear protective ensemble and don’t perform copulation in open. Not only that, now they started to cover their reproductive organs even if the temperature is higher. We also successful in changing  their skin.

Health and Safety Officer: Captain now we can resume mining in full fledges.

Captain: Very well, go ahead.

____________________________________________________________

After 5 years, during the debriefing in situation room…….

 

Captain: SITREP please

Science Officer:  Conversion of monkey into human is a successful experiment. Those converted humans have already produced offspring. Offspring show no signs of problem. Captain rate of reproduction from these humans indicate that we don’t need to alter monkeys anymore. The reproduction rate is good enough for mining operation as well as other needs.

Social Counselor: Humans have shown very promising social development Captain. We have report from all five geographical locations that they have developed language skills as well as heliograph for writing. But the languages developed in different geographical areas are different.

They have also shown very strong curiosity about us. Most of them are asking why we don’t eat anything, How we know everything etc. Captain, may be in due course we need to explain them about us.

Captain: Science officer, If we have enough human power then we should stop converting monkey into human. Counselor, before leaving this planet may be we let them know about ourselves.

Social Counselor: Aye sir

Commander: Aye Captain

Captain: Mr. Loran (mining engineer responsible mining of moblotungstaplite) how much material we have collected so far?

Mr. Loran: Captain. We have collected enough material for two engines. We are proceeding according to our initial plan of collecting materials for four engines.

Captain: Very well, what is the purity of the material collected?

Mr. Loran: We have achieved 100% purity Captain

Captain: Make sure that we have prototype of engine ready before we leave this planet

Mr. Loran: Aye Captain

To Be continued.......



 
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Continued from above..

Captain: Science officer, If we have enough human power then we should stop converting monkey into human. Counselor, before leaving this planet may be we let them know about ourselves.

Social Counselor: Aye sir

Commander: Aye Captain

Captain: Mr. Loran (mining engineer responsible mining of moblotungstaplite) how much material we have collected so far?

Mr. Loran: Captain. We have collected enough material for two engines. We are proceeding according to our initial plan of collecting materials for four engines.

Captain: Very well, what is the purity of the material collected?

Mr. Loran: We have achieved 100% purity Captain

Captain: Make sure that we have prototype of engine ready before we leave this planet

Mr. Loran: Aye Captain

To be continued.....

 
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After two yrs….during debriefing in situation room

Captain: SITREP please

Social Counselor: Captain, humans are in the process of developing complex society. The process, at present, seems slow but they will be able to transform themselves into a organized civilization within 10, 000 years.

Some of the human have developed leadership skill,  they want to know about us, our work here and their future.  May be, it’s time for us to tell them about us.

Captain: Time indeed, if they have developed leadership skill collect about 100 representatives from all five geographical area, I will brief them myself. We will do that after three days. Start preparation.

Social Counselor: Aye Captain

_____________________________________________

Three days later in convention hall….

A gathering of human representatives, Captain, Commander, Science Officer, Social Counselor and many other member of the starship.

Humans from five different geographical areas were present in the HQ. They were surprised to see other humans from different geographical areas. Till date humans from each geographical area were thinking that they are the only one of their kind. They were very excited.

A universal translator was set up in order to facilitate the   communication between humans from different geographical areas as well as between humans and members of the spaceship.

Captain: Dear friends, you were showing a lot of interest on us. I am aware of your curiosity to know about us. To satisfy your curiosity, I asked my science team to bring small group of you here. I will explain about us and you are free to explain that to other human.

(Humans were showing various gesture of happiness)

Captain: We live very far away from here. At present you might not aware how far our place is, one day you will know. For you information, let me tell you, our planet is 500 light years away from earth.

Our species is called god and name of our planet is “Heaven”. We do not know how we came to exists. Our research shows that, in the beginning the basic building blocks of the universe were concentrated in one sphere. That sphere exploded, we don’t know why, the explosion scattered molecules of universe and life. This scattering created universe.  In the beginning building blocks of life were not aligned properly. Later as a mean to gain the stability they get aligned which help create primitive life.

Because of that energy present in the universe, the smaller molecules of life aligned to form bigger molecules; as a result a single cell was created. The cell absorbed other molecules and reproduced another cell. In due course of time several single cells assembled together to form a complex life. Our ancestors devoted many generations on science and technology. It is their endeavor which helped us to travel across the universe.

Our species have generated vast knowledge about science and technology. Our team is first to venture outside our solar system and we plan to travel outside this galaxy and finally reach the edge of the universe where time is expanding. During our journey we are continuously improving our technology. At present if everything goes according to the plan we are planning to travel outside of the universe into void space in due course.

After travelling for 500 light years we found this planet. This planet has the material we need for new engines for our spaceship. The materials we need to build the engines, we found in your planet. That’s why we landed here. At the time we landed this planet was dominated by big giant carnivorous animals called dinosaurs. We reduced the atmospheric oxygen content from 24% to 21%. Because of this those giant animals disappeared and monkey started to dominate the planets.

Social counselor: (whispering on Captain’s ear), Captain It is too much scientific for them; they are not that intelligent yet to understand all these.

Captain: I understand Counselor, but it is my duty to tell them why we are here and what are the actions we took. I am showing respect of one intelligent life form to another would be intelligent life form.

Captain (once again facing towards the human gathering): We introduced some of our genes into monkeys; those who got our genes got evolved into human. We created you in our image. You are different species than monkey now. Your brain has become larger. You developed language and you are in the process of developing complex human society in years to come.

Captain pauses

One leader looking Human: Can we ask some questions?

Captain: Please feel free to do so

Human Leader: We feel hunger, after working for few hours, we feel tired after working few hours. But we have not seen you eating or getting tired.

Captain: This is because… (Social counselor interrupts) in his low voice:  Captain we should not reveal the things which they are not able to understand, otherwise they misinterpret those. They will know many things by themselves as their knowledge develops)

Captain: This is because we inhabitant of planet “Heaven” are free of these weakness. We get our energy from ourselves with the help of sunlight. We don’t need to eat. Our supply of energy is continuous so we don’t get tired. You have step wise energy supply system that is why you get tired. Also, our body repairs even if we are working; your body needs rest for repair and maintenance.

Human: What are you called?

Captain: Our species is called god.

Human: All gods are good like you?

Captain: No, some of us, because of mutation, have developed nasty behavior, they are not polite, and they get angry they have destructive nature.

Human: What you do with them?

Captain: We call them Devils. In our solar system there is a smaller planet next to us,  the planet is not God friendly but still good enough to live. That planet is called “Hell”.  We send devils to the planet “Hell”

Human: Can we visit planet “Heaven” or planet “Hell”?

Captain: (thinking that there is no enough oxygen for human to breathe in “Heaven” and “Hell”), No you can not visit our planet while you are alive. (Captain also wanted to take this opportunity to influence development of human society into a constructive, positive thinking society). But, when you die, depending upon your Karma, humans will go either to the “Heaven” or to the “Hell”. If you want to go to “Heaven” you have to do good Karma.

Human: Oh

Social Counselor: Whispering on Captain’s ear): Remember Captain they have some of our gene. Few thousands year later some of human will come to know that there is no after life.

Captain: I understand that counselor. But I wanted them have sense of reward and punishment for their Karma. This will guide towards positive development.

Human: When you complete your task / will some of you stay here?

Captain: No

Human: What if we need you for guidance:

Captain: Whispering in science officer’s ear (what is the possibility of our gene that reflects our nature becoming dominant in humans?

Science Officer: Very, very rare Captain. We haven’t injected them behavioral and thought control gene. But our gene that changed their physical structure may produce that gene.

Captain: Is that possible?

Science Officer: Yes Captain, every gene contains memory of evolution. Our gene that controls certain physical characteristics in humans also contains memory of the gene that controls thoughts and behavior.

Captain:  Very well, what is the possibility of that happening?

Science Officer: One in 1 billion, Captain.

Captain: Very well, (facing towards humans) from time to time our kind may incarnate in human form to guide the human society.

Thank you very much. Help us mining Moblotungstapliute, we will be grateful to you.

The meeting adjourned. Humans were sent to their respective places.

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Human gatherings in all five different geographical areas:

Human Leader: We had audience with god today. They created us. They come from the place called “Heaven”. It is a very beautiful place where there is no hunger, no tiredness and no disease. They don’t fight like us. If we do good Karma we go to “Heaven” when we die, and live happily ever after. But if we do bad karma Gods won’t allow us in “Heaven”. They will send us to “Hell”, where there is more suffering than here. “Hell” is terrible place.

Another Human Leader: Unlike us they are not created by someone else. They were created by themselves. Unlike us they don’t die. They have something that makes them immortal. They will come to us as human when we need them and enlighten us. From today we will call devil to human who do bad karma and punish them following the tradition of Gods.


 
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continued from above....


Human: What if we need you for guidance:

Captain: Whispering in science officer’s ear (what is the possibility of our gene that reflects our nature becoming dominant in humans?

Science Officer: Very, very rare Captain. We haven’t injected them behavioral and thought control gene. But our gene that changed their physical structure may produce that gene.

Captain: Is that possible?

Science Officer: Yes Captain, every gene contains memory of evolution. Our gene that controls certain physical characteristics in humans also contains memory of the gene that controls thoughts and behavior.

Captain:  Very well, what is the possibility of that happening?

Science Officer: One in 1 billion, Captain.

Captain: Very well, (facing towards humans) from time to time our kind may incarnate in human form to guide the human society.

Thank you very much. Help us mining Moblotungstapliute, we will be grateful to you.

The meeting adjourned, Humans were sent to their respective places.

To Be Continued.........

 
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inspired by 'stargate universe'??? 

I'm an avid fan of stargate series..
but the way you tweaked the script, it's interesting..

remember, how 'Eli(hacker)' was amazed when 'human' in the past actually started to think or worship 'Nick(brilliant scientist onboard)' as God or Jesus?? It was pretty interesting.

Damn!!! they stopped the show. No more seasons.




 
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So, there are still questions :
1. How did dinasaurs appear?
2. Light year is a measurement unit , it's not like 'years of months' we count.
2. Captain discussing there is no 'afterlife' and then again telling them, they'll "reincarnate" to guide these pesky humans
3. Hell and Heaven planet concept is rad. I mean 'planet'????
That concept of hell and heaven could've been put on this way.. dimensional.

The universe that we see from our limited ability to see at the sky is not really what we see. Just like dogs can't differentiate much colors, we can't differentiate dimensions and other vast array of color spectrum of the universe.

Naming hell and heaven just planets, narrows the whole concept of the creation.

This whole milky galaxy that we're in is changing it's course. We are heading towards ascension as some believe.
If this is a vast universe, and 'captain and his crew' has the technology, then they would be 'warping' through portals like wormholes which connects more than two different universes(just a theory). 

Everything in the universe is created through vibration.
A new word like 'substantiation' could be used to propose the idea of travelling rather than travelling this and that light year distance.

'Captain and the crew' descended to tell those monkeys that they created them, but they don't have the idea of who created them? 
again comes the 'dimension', plug this stuff in and the story would sound more non-pseudoscience

Overall, it's an interesting story. :D 
Super like it. :D 








 
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Bittertruth

Thanks for reading and commnet.

Here I would like to clarify a little

1. How did dinasaurs

This fantasy is sabout human and god only, yes it is possible to write fiction about appearence of the dinasaurs, but to go up to that lebel may be a tourture for myself.

2. Light yeras , I think I already explained about it in my previous explanation

3. Yope there is no after life thats why I used the word "incarnate" ( appaear) not "reincarnate" (reappear). It is our human nature we see what we want to see, I think that happend to you here.

4. Hell and heaven: Planet vs different dimension. Yes that coud be an  option. I should have explorred different possibilities. But hey, this fiction is being writtien in my busy scehedule so whatever seemingly logical came to my mind I wrote it.but I will keep in mind those options If i write another fiction.

5. The script styel is inspired by Star trek Voyager. I have watched only few episodes of Stargate Universe. They always air it when I am at work.

Once again thnaks for comments

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 Interesting ! Thanks for your writing, ---- bro.


 
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nice job bro, :D 
come up with more interesting stuffs like these.

but hey, about No. 3... "... no afterlife.."
How could you be so sure about it? 
I can show you more than 100 proofs that there is afterlife and there is reincarnation.
Have you heard of edcar casey? 
how about other re-incarnated prophets?
They do show amazing recalls of their past life since their childhood.
There has been researches going on and scientific research is mute so far, no explanation.
I 've more than 12 physicists in my mind, who believes the energy inside us is the life force which can take forms lifetime after lifetime.
I've read books written by scientists, what more can you ask now? Most of these are spiritual in a sense, not saying religious.

If you go and see yourself,contemplate who you are , you'll find yourself close to divinity. That very yourself, that very consciousness which say, you are 'you' , just think about it.. you'll find many answers in my opinion. Just sit in, and think for at least hours in silence. 
The moment our consciousness is Shut Off here, it'll Turn On somewhere else with your very own consciousness. The only difference would be that you won't be able to recall any past memories of your form.

Like to read your response :D 
Chill






 
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Adhikari bandhu,

Thanks for reading,

Bittertruth,

Yes many people claims about after life, there are prophets who claim they are reincarnated.
But our problem is, whom to believe? Believe in those who believe in reincarnation or believe in those who don’t believe in reincarnation?

There are many people who believe in re incarnation and much more who don’t believe in reincarnation
which side shall we take?

In my personal opinion
if you think there are enough evidence to believe after life and reincarnation then you believe on it.
And, if you believe there is enough evidence that there is no after life and reincarnations then you believe on that.

There is no harm in believing either of those two beliefs, until you remain peaceful.
After reaching 30 I started to think about who am I and why I am here and what I should do in my life. Read many books, many beliefs, and many religious books.

The capacity to reproduce and number of unlimited birth of different life forms indicate there is no after life and reincarnation. Whatever written in religious books have become so controversial that the belief has done more harm to human than benefit.

Those books which was supposed to do good for human have spread haltered and eneimicty among humans.

It’s  like Nepalese people  claiming themselves as Amale,  Amobadi, Kangress, Rajabadi all claiming that they are the best and they only can salvage Nepali / Nepal, You know the result,  Nepal/ Neplai going downhill, at least last half century.

To be a good human, you just need your heart and brain everything else is just make ups.

These are just my personal opinion

Do I claim I am absolutely right? Nope

Do I claim these are my final believes? Nope

If there are (In my opinion) compelling evidence about the things other than my beliefs than I will change.   My belief will change. Flexibility is the key word.

But in any case I will neither fight nor hate another human just to force my beliefs. Your beliefs are as good as mines if they are  peacefull.



 
 
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I was not able complete the whole story when I posted this comment. Now it all makes sense. Nice read.
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