bhanechi 96 tira ko kuro recha.. Pepsi cup ta uti bela SA le jityaa thiyo kyaare
neva mind, as alwaz, story line is awesome.. jus wanted to let u know.. we are waiting to hear from u soon.. real soon
Enjoyed ,, waiting for more...n ..................Prabhat ..............nice selection of name....hahaha..................
Very Interesting, and excellent writeup. Would love to read more of it.
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More Please !!
kukhura chor,killer_eyes, 129 lane, SaagRaSisnu, slackdemic, fucheketo, saajha, sikuti all of you thank you very much.
Fucheketo, there is a reason behind the name Prabhat!!!
And I am sorry for making you wait so long.
Anyways here is the third part.
eclectic,
enjoyed it thoroughly sathi. :)
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Great Eclectic..your intricate details makes it more interesting to read!! :)
Khushii, Brandy thank you for your lovely comments.
Here is the fourth part.
awww....sweet story ,sweetly told :)
loved it !
Crafty writin..........Feels like every common guys story.........!!!! I can feel prabhat within me....!!!
Hope to see more from u ....!!!
Thanks Piggy, Fucheketo. I will come soon with another one.
Eclectic,
Good piece.
I find myself in lots of places.....I realized I 'followed' some of your paths
.... Kirtipur (I was in Naya Bazar)... BaghBhairab...Jatras..English Literature... and so many other strings..
Keep it up Eclectic.
Guchcha Chor
Hey eclectic, hats off to you man, very nice combitation of words. I was also a english litreature major for a while and can smell the words. You've used every single words so nicely that it does touch the heart of every readers and gets their attention. Must say you did a great job. I'll be eagerly waiting for another story soon. Thank you sir.
bd.
simple and nice. had good time reading it.
A hearty thanks to Guchcha chor, Boulevard dreams and abc_n_xyz with a promise to be back soon with another story.
A CLEAR PROJECTION OF AN OUTSIDER ( STUDENT) IN THE VALLEY...
BRO.........U SURE CAN WRITE... LOVED IT.... HOPE TO READ MORE FROM YOU.. KUDOS
Thanks alche bro, I am trying hard to make an imminent appearance in Sajha with something new.
Well, thanks Amitraja. But, these days I have been too busy and I should admit I have been missing Sajha and all the Sajha Bashis.
Hi Electic,
Nice Story.. I have read this a way long back. I saw this thread once again, and was trying convey my view on your story
But I would say, I was little disappointed by the how story ends or so should I say i was disappointed by the flow of the story.
What i noticed that at the beginning you describe each small event very carefully. Till third part, things are so carefully described that you can feel that you were also physically present on the scene. At that time I thought you are trying to bring so many incident and sub-incident in the story. But all of expectations fell flat, as u just finished that story in next episode, it seems like that you are in some haste or so
I am not English Major or Nepali Major. My critique is skill is not so good, but hope that you will understand what i am trying to convey.
Plz take it as constructive criticism.
Thanks khoikkhoi for your comment.For me all the comments are constructive. so you need not worry about it. Rather, I am delighted to read your criticism and to know the loop holes in my story from your perspective.
Yes, you are very true that the ending does seem to be in a little bit haste but I have tried to present the story in more realistic way than fictitious. So, this may have led to an unexpected ending or not a happy ending overall.
But, anyways its for sure that your words will definitely have an effect on me and I assure that you can observe the changes in my coming stories.
Thank you again and I expect to hear from you in the coming days too.
eclectic.
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