Eventhough you wrote it in your 7th grade, it still reflects the current situation. A very good one.

santosh1984 · Oct 18, 2009 12:59 PM

Ha Ha Ha, don't keep it up, because it is too late. keep it up, now

timer · Oct 18, 2009 1:21 PM

Dynu cha!! its really good... :D as i have said before :p.... keep em coming :D...

girly_gurl · Oct 18, 2009 1:27 PM

 Dear Dynamite, Kakshya saatma yesto kabita lekhney ta pakkai pani ahiley dhurandhar kabi bhai sakeyko hunu parcha, ki kaso? :) You sure do have a talent. Keep honing your skills. G'luck! -Grace

Grace_S · Oct 18, 2009 9:02 PM

Prodigy ho ki ke ho :) very well written poem.

PIGGY · Oct 19, 2009 1:16 AM

ati ramro ....i LOveeeee it!!!

daum · Oct 19, 2009 6:11 AM

डाइनामाइट को यो बिस्फोटक कबिता पढेर मन भित्र धमाकेदार बिस्फोटन भयो । सात पढ्दा यस्तो लेख्ने डाइना ब्रो, ग्रेश ले भने जस्तै " कक्षा सातमा यस्तो कबिता लेख्ने त पक्कै पनि अहिले धुरन्धर कबि भै सकेको हुनु पर्छ, कि कसो?" बडा सुन्दर सिर्जना, लेख्दै गरम ब्रो, मन अल्हादित हुन्छ ।

rahulvai · Oct 19, 2009 9:09 AM

गज्जब राम्ररी लेखेको छ Well Written Dyna

serial · Oct 19, 2009 9:16 AM

यहाँ दुई पात्रत्वको dichotomy छ – एउटा नाक थुनेर बस्ने ‘हामीहरु' र अर्को दूर्गन्धित ‘तिनीहरु” । मेरो विचारमा यो पृथकता धेरै हदसम्म एउटा भ्रम हो । वास्तविकता के हो भने ‘हामीहरु’ कुनै न कुनै भूमिकामा ‘तिनीहरु’ नै हौं । यो कुरो नलुकोस् ।

Nepe · Oct 19, 2009 10:45 AM

Thanks all, santosh1984- yup i think it still applies timer- :) its not too late girly_gurl - thanks, ur too sweet Grace_S - unfortunately I stopped writing, so I wonder if I can hone my talent now PIGGY- the prodigy died :( daum- I am glad you loved it, your encouragement keeps me going rahulvai- No match for your talent, but thanks and I am glad you liked it serial- thanks, i write because of readers like you :) Nepe- very good observation, "hami" is a part of "tiniharu", we all stink yet complain about others stinking. And we should go for the remedy of stink rather than putting a mask on. :) Thank you all for liking the poem again. The encouragement motivates me to write again. I am waiting for  other constructive and critical responses.

dynamite · Oct 19, 2009 6:29 PM

.I agree with Nepe's observation

mickthesick · Oct 19, 2009 7:28 PM

o...ho... mahodaya....yaho ko yo kabita bata sachhai ko sugandha aayo....

ram_bahadur · Oct 22, 2009 5:16 AM

Thanks for the feedbacks mickthesick and ram_bahadur :)

dynamite · Oct 26, 2009 2:48 PM

Dyno Didin't knew you have such a talent..anyways good work n yes keep it flowing!!!! :)

brandy · Oct 26, 2009 3:33 PM

ठूल्दाईले भन्नुभए जस्तो 'विष्फोटक!!" राम्रो!  

Birkhe_Maila · Oct 26, 2009 3:36 PM

Dynamite exploded finally :) nice piece bro, keep it up.

ritthe · Oct 26, 2009 4:03 PM