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baaaaang.. into pieces.. an utter moment of silence, then follows a heartbreak, a catastrophe which swallows ur imaginations put into shape ur emotions and repressions that are desperate to come out the solid form of ur liquid thoughts,  feelings that cannot be express any other ways its like raising a child, u never think u'll lose it u cannot react or repent its gone, so is the connection u had.. the aftermath would be even worse ur mind begs u ur long repressed emotions torment u they beg to be let free u are helpless ur imagination curses u ur thoughts vaporize and u burn out but would u be able to make it again! alas (I wrote this poem when a clay sculpture of mind burst while I was baking it. I had already grown a lot of connection with it. Life wont be the same again without it)

bhateram · Apr 27, 2009 10:49 AM · 19,163 views

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pls comment guys

bhateram · Apr 27, 2009 11:36 PM

The title of your thread sucked all the fragrance off your poem.

twanke · Apr 28, 2009 12:23 AM

No one likes to be tricked into reading something. People like you are doing a disgrace to others who might actually have urgent matters they want discussed.

_bored · Apr 28, 2009 3:53 AM

Get a life retard!!! I thought somebody needed urgent help.

Stiffler · Apr 28, 2009 12:26 PM

thukka bhate...naam pani bhaate kaam pani bhaate.......... I dont even have to read your poem...with the title you had over there.....what a retard.... I doubt you wrote that poem...shud be copy pasted from somewhere or a steal...

jptsamachar · Apr 28, 2009 5:37 PM

its a good poem.

herealone · Apr 28, 2009 5:52 PM

I gave you -ve on your poem. You cheated on the title and didn't even dare to read it. Good Luck.

peacesoul · Apr 28, 2009 7:17 PM

retarded poem of retarded khate.

hundari · Apr 28, 2009 9:48 PM

What is a clay sculpture of mind? I hope you're still ok, after it brust! Lesson: don't bake your mind. my comment seems immature - maybe i get what you mean. Last edited: 29-Apr-09 02:43 AM

commando · Apr 28, 2009 9:53 PM

Bhateram, u cannot react or repent its gone, so is the connection u had.. the aftermath would be even worse ur mind begs u ur long repressed emotions torment u they beg to be let free u are helpless ur imagination curses u ur thoughts vaporize and u burn out but would u be able to make it again! alas Would u be able to make it again! We don't say alas Please do keep on writing. You have deep voice within. Just give it an appropriate name.

twanke · Apr 29, 2009 2:23 AM

thanks twanke, I know it was my fault... the title was misleading...I will post it fairly next time...

bhateram · Apr 29, 2009 8:41 AM

Bhate and Twanke would make a good pair.

newlynew · Apr 29, 2009 8:48 AM

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