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This is playwrite assnment for my class. Its gonna be performed. So, please comment. Good,bad,worse anything. I dont wanna leave any mistakes. The play had to be on time travel. So this is it. Thanx in advance The Old love – Herealone   Every time Ron calls from his old phone, it gets connected to Sophie’s. They start talking and soon become friends. Ron and Sophie finds out that they have been living in a different time dimension. Ron is in the present and Sophie in the past of 1979. They are talking on the phone.   Ron: It has got to be the coldest night.   Sophie: Could be. Well, it’s hard.   Ron: I never imagined even in my dreams about it.   Sophie: Yes, it’s funny and weird. But most, it’s depressingly sad.   Ron: I wonder how it feels to be in the past.   Sophie: Or to be in the future.   Ron: What?   Sophie: Never mind. So you're saying the president will be a black?   Ron: Yes. I think I said it thousand times.   Sophie: Ya, well you won’t understand.   Ron: Hey ammm... Sophie. Can you find some info about my parents?   Sophie: (Laughs) Oh yeah...your parents and I are the same age. Oh wow!! I forgot.   Ron: They're dead now. But they hated each other while they were alive. They got divorced later on. My dad got married with someone else.   Sophie: And?   Ron: And... As a child instead of my mom making breakfast, I had to look after almost everything. She was living in pills.   Sophie: Oh, that’s sad.   Ron: Anyway, Can you find about them? And see what really went wrong?   Sophie: My pleasure! It'll be my mystery case.   (Ron gives the information about his parents to Sophie. Sophie puts the phone down.) (Sophie goes and searches for his parents. But she shocked when finds that his dad is the guy with whom she is having an affair. )   (After two days the again talk over the phone)   Ron: So did you find anything? Sophie: Yes, Ron. Ron: So? Sophie: So… Your parents are having some kinda problems. But don’t worry. I think I can help them solve it out. Ron: Really? Sophie:  Yes.  So tell me was there any lady that your dad had an affair? Ron: Well, I really don’t know. But if I could meet that lady, I wanna ask why did she have to destroy our family?   ( Sophie is sad and angry by Ron’s words)   Sophie: Ya, ok. Well Ron. Lets talk after a few weeks.   ( Sophie hangs up the phone without any notice) ( Sophie decides to leave her lover that is Ron’s dad. She feels that if a decision from her can change someone’s life for better, then why not. Besides, she is having some feelings for Ron.) (A week passes by and they again talk over the phone)   Ron: What happened last time? Sorry I must have been talking only about me. Sophie: No, its not that. Its just that im having some problem with my life. Ron: Like what? May be I can help you. Well, advice is all I can do for help. Sophie: Ron, thank you. You’re very sweet. But I don’t wanna continue our chats anymore. I think I’m starting to fall in love with you. And there’s future between us. I’m in the past and you’re in your present. What’s the sense of us talking? Even after I helped ure parents. Will it make any difference to you now? You past is already gone. No matter what you’re childhood is not gonna come back. Good bye, Ron. I hope you will have happy life. Ron: Sophie, please don’t say…   (Before Ron gets complete is words, Sophie again hangs up the phone) (Sophie spends the whole day crying. ) (2 months pass by and still Ron is unable to forget Sophie. The more he thinks about her, more he is in love with her. Suddenly, Ron thinks of searching for her. Ron tells his story to his friend, Alen. And both head for the search)   Alen: So, do you think she is still alive? Ron: My heart says so. If there is something called love in this world then definitely she is still alive. Alen: OK, then. Let’s go to her university. Probably someone knows about her. After some efforts they find out that she is alive. After getting her address they directly head out to her house Alen: Alrite man, this is it. What are you gonna say? Ron: I don’t know. What ever the words gonna come out. Alen: Ok, but its waste of time. She’s not even gonna remember you.   (Ron walks though the gate and sees a middle aged woman watering the plants.)   Ron: Excuse me. Sophie: Ammm…who?? Ron: It’s me. Sophie: Have I seen you somewhere? Ron: No, but you must have heard of me. I’m your biggest fan. I’m in love with you. Sophie: I don’t know who you are but I feel like I’ve known you. Ron: Would you like to take walk with me? Sophie: Yes.    

herealone · Apr 7, 2009 4:43 PM · 6,506 views

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It ez way too long son, i dont have time to read this, though it looks nice

8848m · Apr 7, 2009 4:48 PM

Thanx 8848.

herealone · Apr 7, 2009 5:02 PM

if i were your professor...youd get an F now go cry to your mother about it

sajhakovillain · Apr 7, 2009 5:08 PM

F(k you sajhako Ran...Di,.... whats ure problem? Dont bring mother on the the topic....u got not other words...???

herealone · Apr 7, 2009 5:53 PM

sajhakovillain · Apr 7, 2009 6:15 PM

Dude, i c u have been watching korean movies, huh!! OR may b u r just 2 intelligent to write something that already has a movie based around it. Hopefully ur professor is not a fan of korean movies as well, otherwise he will notice that you have copied it almost exactly like "Ditto" !! ur article: C+

Relax_Singh · Apr 8, 2009 10:29 AM

u have lots of gramatical errors. like After two days the again talk over the phone) But she shocked you should not use words like gonna. there are some more please correct it. good work if its urs. good luck.

abc_n_xyz · Apr 8, 2009 10:51 AM

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