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pepesilva · May 9, 2020 5:16 AM

रड्डी भन्नुभयो किन होला? अलिकती briefing गर्नुस् न। म कबि त हैन। तैपनी try गर्दै नि। (only if you ain't Underwear ) मलाई शन्का लागि राछ।

Bennedict · May 9, 2020 11:01 PM

It's good ... but, nothing new .. that's what life is! it seems, people are more inclined to like a little bit of absurdity like : सालको पातको टपरि हुनि, नहुनि सल्लैको तिम्रो माया कति छ कति, नलाउ पछि हल्लैको ;)

AnandNepal · May 9, 2020 11:18 PM

हजुर आनन्द सर, मैले कबिता पोस्ट गरेर सबले तारिफै तारिफ गरोस भनेर कहिले सोच्दिन, अनी तपाईंले भन्नु भाको सही लाग्यो, people are inclined to absurdity बिशेष गरेर साझामा चै। रड्डी छ भनेर किन रड्डी भनेको होला चै लागेको थियो। अझै केही change गर्न मिल्छ कि भनेर नी। Thank you for reading

Bennedict · May 10, 2020 12:24 AM

Ananda ji, sanchhai hunu hunchha? Last edited: 13-May-20 12:23 PM

pepesilva · May 10, 2020 12:52 AM

मैले पहिले नै भनेको थिए यो पहिले english मा थियो। मैले उल्था गर्दा कतै कतै it can sound drastic तै पनि english पोस्ट गर्दैछु, अनी मैले किन त्यस्तो गरे हुंला please हेर्नुहोला र फेरी comment गर्नुहोला। Poems, prayers and promises Every time…… Happiness tries to spread its wings Disguised, comes a misfortune Serves a massive blow Right on the face Shatters my beliefs on Poems, prayers and promises, And all that keep one going Precarious turns the future With nowhere to go and hide My sense of joy dies young……… Ever vicious have been the ways, To my dreams, And the lonesome heart, I own And the places, soul resorts to Aspirations then fade away, Belittling the sole existence Backstabbing all of my plans Feet chained up, Unable to move on As my life faces a series of setbacks A warm heart, thus, gets victimized In every possible nasty way Each time…… Long saved optimism Loses its chance, After it tries persistently Leaves me helpless At my own twisted fate, And the world of uncertainties, Where daunting furthers to depressing Deprived of all the small pleasures, I tried so hard to assemble Myself stand, Doubting on all that keep one going, And on man made, All those codes of beliefs Referred always, in and as Poems, prayers and promises….. (The poem is inspired by a John Denver’s song. This is a small attempt to delve differently into the main theme and the title of his song.)

Bennedict · May 10, 2020 1:02 AM

The last time I listened to John Denver might have been in my +2 days. A friend of mine sang “Country road take me home” in one of those +2 Welcome party. That’s when I first dug into John Denver. My favorite Jon Denver’s song has to be Sunshine on my shoulders. A peaceful song to hum with your guitar and recall your past memories with a pinch of nostalgia. The title “Poems, prayers, and Promises” seems to resonate a powerful message of hope, belief, and gracefulness without actually digging into the lyrics (just the title itself). Anyways coming back to your creation, I thought maybe I can recook it a bit differently without losing its actual taste or let’s say without actually changing the actual words, leaving it as it is, although I did try to add a bit of my own. I hope I didn’t offend. I haven’t written any poems since my school days may be cos of my lack of interest or time or my own negligence. So, after reading your poem, I thought maybe I can relate to it in some way, I figured, might as well give it a shot to reshuffle it a bit. Every time happiness strives to spread its wings Comes a misfortune so disguised Serving a massive blow on the face Shattering my beliefs on poems, prayers, and promises And all that keeps one going Precariousness has its ways turning my future With nowhere to hide My sense of joy dies young... A vicious blow graces my dreams The places my soul resorts to And this lonesome heart of mine While these aspirations slowly fade away As my life faces all these unpleasant setbacks Belittling my sole existence and backstabbing all my plans With my feet chained up unable to move on Oh how this warm heart of mine has become a victim Every time, my guarded optimism dies, despite all the persistence Leaving me helpless at my own twisted fate In the world of uncertainties Depressed, and deprived of all the little pleasures And I try, I try so hard To assemble myself and stand Against all the doubts that keeps one going Amongst these man-made codes of beliefs

looper · May 10, 2020 6:55 PM

Hi looper Sir, Thank you for reshuffling the poem. I do not mind it at all! In fact, I get to see through your point of view as well. I liked the way you condensed the lines, and shortened some of the redundancies. This was an old work, lost in cloud somewhere. Just documented what I was thinking at that time while listening to John Denver. I wished I had known before about this great singer in my life, but I learnt about him only after coming out of Nepal. I heard it somewhere that if anybody wants to learn guitar chords or learn singing or English, he is the ultimate guide to follow, but that may be relative thing again. "Poems, prayers and promises", the title has that charm I think they call it as 'alliteration' where all the words start with a same 'p'. Sounds good to ears and is catchy so to speak and singers do that to get the attention of listeners right away. But while I was trying hard to translate them to Nepali, I think I had my moments of 'lost in translation'. But it's okay. I am not a professional poet. But thanks again for spending some time. Cheers

Bennedict · May 11, 2020 1:14 AM

पेपेसिल्वा जि, Thank you for your analysis. मैले ट्राइ गरेको हो, अब phony सुनियो भन्नु भयो। मैले सोच्दा धेरै जस्तो नेपालीमा लेखेको कबिताहरुमा भावुकता बढी हुन गयो भने they dont sound real म मान्छु। अब तपाईंले भन्नु होल तेसरि को बोल्छ अहिले को time मा त्यो पनि। bogus सुनिनुको reasons छन। किन भने हामी दैनिक जिबनमा त्यस्तो language use गरेर बोल्दैनम, धेरै कारणले, हत्तार, समय को अभाव, बदलिदो time अनी abstract कुरा गर्ने फुर्सद नहुनु आदी। अब साझामा आएर यस्तो कबिता पढि बस्ने मान्छेको मन पनि हुन्न र patience पनि हुन्न। तपाईंले पढेर analysis गरिदिनु भयो, धन्यवाद। punctuation को गड्बडी हुन सक्छ, I agree अनी डट् डट राख्नु को कारण चै pause लिन खोजेको थिए। intentional break लिना ट्राइ गर्दा maybe it didnot work spontaneous भर powerful overflow of emotions भएन होला। I will keep in mind next time तर I dont agree जुन तपाईंले भन्नु भयो नि poetry is dead anyways भनेर, त्यो चै I beg to disagree अलिकती आफ्नो horizon broaden गर्ने हो कि। म यहाँ तपाईंलाई लामो लामो lecture दिन चाहन्न तर तपाईंले लेख्नु हुन्न भनेर अरु कसैले पनि लेख्तैनन भन्ने सोच्नु चै भएन हो।

Bennedict · May 11, 2020 1:37 AM

I am sure there is some confusion ensuing here. What's happening again? Last edited: 13-May-20 12:24 PM

pepesilva · May 11, 2020 3:20 AM

गज्जब राम्रो कविता, मन पर्यो,

ssk · May 11, 2020 4:26 PM