Posted by: sakumaku March 27, 2016
New Short Film
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@Shrestha8:

Its nicely done short film.

+tive:
Acting is natural
Cinematography & Sound are decent.
Editing is crisp

-tive:
Screen direction (when boss & main actor are talking at boss office from 02:35, their screen direction keep changing. For example, during this scene, sometimes your main actor is on right side of the screen and sometime left, you should not change screen direction within a scene, please research more about screen direction.

Dialogue: I prefer less dialogue and more visual but that could be just me. In future, you may want to research more about the real conversation at that situation, when boss and actor are talking, their dialogue has no impact. Boss could have asked about specific project rather than just how are you and why you are late conversation.

Cutaways/insert shot vs self dialogue: in pre-dating scene in office, when main actor keeps saying 'oh its 4:30 already, of its nearly 8:00 pm' etc, you could have used insert of a wall clock and have actor's reaction to that. I think that would have more effective.

With limited location and actors, you have done great job. Keep it up.

Sakumaku
Last edited: 27-Mar-16 02:30 PM
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