As Bibek suggested, white balance, night exposures etc could have been better. But, hey its your first try so good job for the first project. 
And I would like to comment on the content as well. It sounded like reciatation of the dialouges ! When we are alone and think we do not have any dialouges to read from, do we? Dialouge delivery should not sound like you are reading off of paper. 

anyway, keep up the good work !