Heart touching story indeed. I also liked the other one you wrote. I do think that you should work on your English ( that does not mean I am good at it , come on its not our mother language), however, your potential of writing is very good and you can be a very good story teller in international level if you work on your English Grammer/Vocabulary. There may be another Samrat Upadhyay inside you, who knows ?

Keep going.