Uranus
Please read my comments again. I don't know how I am talking about "whole different dimension."
Let me help u out, my poiny is that the minor descrepancies are justified since a character in the story is expressing those sentence strucures. Is you have a character who is dyslexic and you write a dialogue for him you don't expect that dialogue to have perfect english do you? Doesn't mean the writer is dyslexic.
What's "whole diff dimension" about that?