"Raw" and "Gross" are extreme words for me and definitely those words didn't express your intentions.
However, I am glad that you realized it and took time to do some constructive criticism.

As
far as my writing, this is my first attempt to write in a political
issue. As I have accepted before, I may not be adequately informed
about the topic as you are. Being an outsider, I didn't have(still
don't have but I will do the research) proper understanding of  Israeli
and Palestinian relationship. I couldn't picture the common pains and
fears because of this ignorance. But in this story neither I have shown
hatred between civilians nor I am advocating Sabira's action. I just
tried to picture conflict between Palestine people and Israeli army and
the outcome.

Again, thank you for your comments. I expect them in future too.