Posted by: yekloyatri August 4, 2008
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Dear Rythm,
The portion of the story that you have put forth on the table is note worthy. This is the exact portion with tantalizing flavors which would make readers curious and wanna come back for more. Have you thought about getting into food business? The description you made about the toddler is quite unique and the way you narrate is very elegant. However, other components in the story so far has no meat on it. I am assuming the story is more about the toddler then their parents.
I really have this curiosity! Why do all and every (9/10) stories wrote or been written in sajha.com talks about a boy and a girl growing up in middle class Kathmandu and moving to U.S for their further studies? As I have talked about this in another story that's floating in the Kurakani area written by FortuneFaded which has the same base. And there are other large numbers of stories that are solely or partially based on that themeline. I am worried that so manny potential and capeable writers limit themself with this storyline. I strongly belive that if they can spend sometime researching a topic out of the mainstream and write about it, trust me we will witness miracles.
Ardent Gazer,
YekloYatri
The portion of the story that you have put forth on the table is note worthy. This is the exact portion with tantalizing flavors which would make readers curious and wanna come back for more. Have you thought about getting into food business? The description you made about the toddler is quite unique and the way you narrate is very elegant. However, other components in the story so far has no meat on it. I am assuming the story is more about the toddler then their parents.
I really have this curiosity! Why do all and every (9/10) stories wrote or been written in sajha.com talks about a boy and a girl growing up in middle class Kathmandu and moving to U.S for their further studies? As I have talked about this in another story that's floating in the Kurakani area written by FortuneFaded which has the same base. And there are other large numbers of stories that are solely or partially based on that themeline. I am worried that so manny potential and capeable writers limit themself with this storyline. I strongly belive that if they can spend sometime researching a topic out of the mainstream and write about it, trust me we will witness miracles.
Ardent Gazer,
YekloYatri