Few characteristics of this story:

* The story is written by a daring female writer with excellent psychoanlysis and state of mind after marriage (of a presumed virgin girl and her expectations of her man).A very well written psychoanalytical piece that is considered to be a taboo in the pretty conservative society - pretty rebelious writing !!

* I have not read any stories (though I am a voracious consumer of internet literary material) about "gay" character in Nepalese context. The Blue Diamond Society will have mixed reactions about the story re kya !! They will be happy to see the character with the "guy" but will feel bad for the potrayed female character.

* The plot was excellently designed as it could generate suspicions, create questions and make one ponder with the twist and turns. ( The presentation and Nepalese context makes the story more interesting for such "gay" related material will be abundent in the net. The flow of the story was great. The diction was excellent.

* The examples like Rajesh Hamal, lacking "that thing" without being vulgar has been done so naturally.

This is skill !!

* My suggestions:

Send the story to some quality literary magazine like "Garima" with minor corrections.

Keep writing. Who knows Crazy_love will get better recoginizition than BP on sexuality.