This story should come with a caution. It hits you like a thunderbolt. Like Parbatya said, if it is self-laudatory, which in all its premise it is; you should read it with utmost care.

A love story, especially self explainatory, should be depicted in beautiful words. Love stories do not have any boundaries, as it can go beyond the norms and just the commonplace or best the mediocrity. But before posting such stories, I urge the writer to read at least once and edit as per necessity. Your soul and heartbeat can get lost in this intricate maze of mistaken paths trodden carelessly.

When you want the world to know what you are thinking, let them know in a way that they applaud you, even if your thoughts are negative. Positive attributes are salvaged by the logical infusion of facts and fantasies, which only you can put in, and let the world know. If you cannot do that, maybe, you should not let the world know. It will only quell your zeal, and the soul of your love story. No offense intended, but you should really think and edit before posting. Nobody is perfect, but sloppiness in no excuse either.