Sum _ off.....in one word, this is brilliant! Utterly ,totally,absolutely@! It would have been nice to sit down and hear you talk about how this tale flowed from your pen or rather in the modern day scenario...your keyboard !:P

You have managed to capture throughout your writing  the most dreamlike quality whereby I could almost find myself in  midst of it all;bewildered,yet unwiling to regain consciousness. I truly felt  that although  the characters were not fully developed,(since it IS a short story) they still managed to retain a sense of human-ness which is vital and makes reading that much more enjoyable and more importanatly, believable . The beginning is rather daunting though....:P I had to re-read  to understand which way the river flowed. Having said that, sum_off, I  beqeueth you the title of being my all time favourite  writer  in Sajha.