Rythm!

Am I glad I checked Sajha on a saturday morning! Excellentesmos, fantasticmos, perfectesmos :)

That gentle female narrative voice is simply awesome. It is comes across as extremely genuine to me. You have done a great job bringing the characters to life using a captivating narrative style and touching on several different types of emotions that most of your readers probably go through themselves. I like that there is no real anger in the narrators voice - only curiosity, compassion, love, glimspes of joy, sadness and finally what seems to be acceptance. That's a very appealing mix IMHO.

That's not to say all stories - by you or others - should be that way. I've learnt that the best way, maybe the only way, to appreciate someones writing is to accept, and not argue with, what the writer wants to say. I had no problems on that account with this story.

Lastly, thanks for sharing this. Please keep writing. I'm tired of saying get published so I'll just settle for reading your work on Sajha :) (talk about acceptance there )

Have a great weekend.

:) {Edited: When will I ever learn to write a few sentences without typos!}