Wait! is that the end? coz I don't see your lovely phrase "to be continued" anymore. :P...if this is not the case and you're still gonna continue, then am eagerly waiting, else, have to tell, you've rushed through the story and just murdered what it seemed like a promising plot! :P and i'll tell you why i felt so: your story started on a promising note with two complete contrasting characters: dhriti and karma getting to know each other and in spite of the poles apart characters and background, finding a niche for each other. 1) why the need of the third character Lobsang (the monk) in the third part, if it'd got to be the last part? unless you have brought strong enough point for dhriti to NOT like Karma or vice versa , there was no need of the third character to ruin the slow romantic plot that was developing between dhriti and karma! 2) secondly, if the monk had to be there in the story, why bring him in the last part? how can you expect us (readers) to believe that a conservative, classy character like dhriti will fall for a new character so quickly? don't you think you hurried on it in a quite unconvincing manner? 3) the story could have done great even without some dramatic moments like lobsang massaging dhriti's feet or she playing basketball with them men! thank god, you didn't play a background music hehe :P. you brought some typical hindi masala movies moments (kuch kuch hota hai or sth) by doing so and marred the seriousness of the plot. it didn't suit a character with panache that dhriti got! 4) it was never told that dhriti had a disturbing family life until at the ending. it came too quickly to me as a reader andi found it hard to believe in. all in all, i am not quite satisfied with the ending (the last part). i hope you're still gonna continue, coz after reading your "bharyang muniko rana" and the first two parts of this story, i thought you could do a lot better than this as a story teller. don't take it otherwise. you took my first comment as a constructive criticism. hope you'll do the same justice to this :) LooTe