Nirman, the story seems to have derailed with the introduction of all those comic businesses and porn things. something like an eulogy of events. Hard to believe that children of class 5(you had just passed 4,didn't u? accord. to the storyline) could even do those businesses? Before that you had your real or some sort of reality and fictional stuff in the story. You tried to add some spice on that and it has made this episode a mess. Anyway, still you can give justice to your story by putting on the real reminiscence of your past love where lies the truth and your heart. This could be a good novel featuring a traingular love story with a tragic end. Put your heart in the story line and you can achieve something good. Best of luck. Newuser.