Posted by: Bennedict May 5, 2021
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Eclectic,
Interesting read! Would like to point out the aspects of your writing that caught my attention.
# the characters have not been named and I like it.
# the imagery you have drawn is quite captivating at places, like the morning scene where the male character is established, the vibes inside the café, the deskription of the lake amidst the lights and breeze trying to 'mix the colors'. The last one was just too good!
# the concluding line spoken by the male character was the icing on the cake, I believe. One can understand in a lot many ways that suit them. It is too hard not to be mundane. Well!
Your plot did remind me of a book that I read last year, a novel called 'Half Girlfriend' by Chetan Bhagat. I have conveniently stopped reading books for a long time now, the only reason I think I picked this book was because I had seen this movie, "Two States" based on the book by Chetan Bhagat and I liked it. In 'Half Girlfriend' a male character goes on to scout around for the girl he wanted to marry after she disappears in some suspicious contexts. This Bihari man here lands in New York and visits every other much visited bars to look out for his girl as she has been an aspiring singer while in India. Little bit too much to digest, maybe that's why the movie made later on did not make that great of the news as such.
Anyway, liked the suspense built up, hoping to read up on how you are going to conclude.
Cheers!
B.
Last edited: 05-May-21 05:14 PM