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Posted on 03-29-12 9:56 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Disclaimer: This post is a work of fiction and all characters appearing in this work are fictitious. Any resemblance to real persons, living or dead, is purely coincidental.
THE DEPARTURE
“Congratulations”, I smiled. “A dentist in Baltimore?”
“Yeah”, she nodded, her eyes wandered all over looking outside the window, fearing someone she knew might spot us together. 
She had called me few days ago to meet up, and here I was, sitting across the table sipping a soda in that same quiet restaurant in Kupondole we often met for last two years. This was our last meeting and we had just agreed were not going to see each other again.
She was getting married.
“You know the drill right? Even if we bump into each other, we’d pretend we have never met before” She said.
“Do you seriously believe he will never know it? I assume he has several friends who know you were going out with me” I responded.
“And why wouldn’t you tell me his name?”  I added. “I just want to know who that poor guy is, does he even know what is he getting into? ” I reached out for her palm across the table and squeezed it hard. She pulled it away almost instantly.
“It doesn’t matter - none of your business, have you brought my pictures?” She asked – a little annoyed with my ill-timed humor.
I handed a large manila over to her looking straight into her eyes. She grabbed it, took a moment to count the photographs inside.
“Where is the one in the bathing suit?”
“I lost it” I lied.
“You men” She rolled her eyes and shook her head.
We didn’t speak anything for few seconds; she started fidgeting and looked outside the restaurant nervously.
 “Relax, will you? No one is going to see us here, and even when someone does, you can always tell I was your friend in college”
“It’s not that, you boys don’t understand, you live in this free man’s world and seem completely oblivious about how parochial Nepalese society thinks about women”
“Seriously? You are telling that to me NOW? Whatever happened to that society when you were drunk out of your wits in club X zone last year, and how we spent a night in Nagarkot while your parents were travelling?”
“Shut up, just friggin’ shut up” She lifted a fork off the table and pointed towards me “Another word and I’ll kill you”
“Truth hurts eh!”  I chuckled, “Your hypocrisy surprises me Sheetal, all these years you lived the life the way you wanted, drank gallons of liquor, stole your dad’s cigarettes, even smoked marijuana during a picnic in Kakani, and ranted about cultural emancipation of women. But now, since you are getting married, you just want to portray yourself as virgin f@#$ing Mary”
“Alright, big mistake” she snarled –folding the envelope and shoving into her bag “I shouldn’t have dated a loser like you”
“I thought you loved me” I squinted.
“In your dreams dimwit, I just pitied you”
Our relationship was all about wisecracks and sarcasms, we were friends before we became lovers and although we both cared deeply about each other, we could never get enough of calling each other names. Quite honestly, I doubted if our relationship lasted a week if we both were mushy lovers.  I never bought her candies, and she never set a foot inside Archie’s to buy a Valentine’s Day card.  However, there was something about her that was bothering me today, I never saw her so hostile. I understood she was trying to be indifferent towards me but I could not comprehend what the sudden animosity was all about.
“What’s bothering you” I asked.
“Nothing, nothing really. I just want to go home.”
“You’re kidding me, we are supposed to have dinner together, I mean how often are we going to see each other again?”
“Never….!” She looked into my eyes for the first time. “You don’t get it do you? I am getting married in few weeks, and this dinner doesn’t change anything if that is what you were hoping for.”
“I mean look at you.” She added, “You’re still a junior in engineering school, who still has ages left to prove himself. To top it off, you are insecure, envious, average looking, and the only reasons people know you is because of your brother.”
“Wow!” my eyes narrowed. “Is that what you had in mind about me all this time?”
She looked away, looking outside the window once again.
A long silence ensued.
Sheetal and I had been completely honest about how we felt about each other. I’d tell her that her breasts resembled mosquito bites, and she’d tell me I had toes like an alien’s. She listened to Celine Dion; I hated Celion Dion. She thought my dad looked as evil as Prem Chopra, and I’d pick her often for taking a picture with Rajesh Hamal. We literally hated everything about each other yet somehow managed to survive two good years.  I have to admit, despite all these behavioral misalignments, I liked her very much. But now, on the final day of our relationship, the last thing I wanted her to do was belittle me like I was a piece of trash. I quickly did the math, over last two years; I had spent almost ten thousand rupees worth of gasoline, only on her, let alone other expenses.
I had just started hating her. I suddenly wanted every penny back. Few hours ago, I had left home sad, very sad, that I would never see Sheetal again, but now I just couldn’t wait to get her out of my sight.
“Alright, let’s go” I grabbed my helmet and headed towards the door.
“Sir order??” A young server leaped towards me, with a small piece of paper and a ball-pen.
I stared at him for a moment. He swallowed hard.
“Here, “ I handed him over a twenty rupee bill, I momentarily forgot I had bought a bottle of Pepsi, “keep the change”.
I closed the door behind me, leaned against the restaurant’s glass window and lit a cigarette, my fingers were shaking for no apparent reason. The thought of her being still being within a close proximity disgusted me.
“F@#*ing slut”. I mumbled. I couldn’t wait to get home and burn that picture of her in a bikini to ashes.
She came out of the restaurant a moment later, clutching her handbag. The yellow Manila was not visible anymore. She must have thrown that envelope away and neatly tucked in the photographs.
I saw her reaching out for a taxi and speaking to a driver. I saw him shaking his head.
She stood there, looking for another cab and was visibly worried when she couldn’t find any.
“Alright, whatever” I muttered in annoyance and walked towards her.
“I am going to drop you off” I said apathetically “and don’t say a word or else I’ll kill you”
She silently sat in the rear seat as I kicked my motorcycle to start. I then accelerated instantly; cutting a suv which almost rear ended me. It honked several times. I smiled; I remembered how she feared me riding recklessly. Next half hour was more than enough to avenge every bit of slander she had bestowed on me.
She didn’t say a word, I looked into the mirror, she had closed her eyes.
“Could you ride towards Indian embassy? I don’t want to be dropped off in Lazimpat.” She finally spoke to me, her first few words in last half hour.
“Stop, stop right by the gate, in the alley” she pointed towards the alley between the then British and Indian Embassy”.
“What?” I looked at her in the mirror, “You want me to drop you ‘here’ “?
Ever since I was a child, I had heard stories about that dark alley between British and Indian Embassy. Densely covered by long bamboo trees which grew right inside the walls of the Indian embassy and extended all the way to the other end of the road, it looked ominous even in the broad day light. To make matters worse, there was a British cemetery few hundred yards off that alley and there were stories that the evil spirits that came out of the graveyard scared every pedestrian that walked that street in the evening. It was already 7:00pm and the alley was pitch-dark.
“Seriously Sheetal, you want me to drop you here?” I asked again.
She didn’t say anything for few seconds. And suddenly, I felt her arms around my chest. She embraced me from behind and leaned her head on my back. I froze, the feel of her breasts against my back reminded me of the old times when she used to hug me as I sped my motorbike. She was crying.
“What’s wrong Sheetal?” My voice mellowed for the first time after that argument.
“Nothing…” She got off the motorbike.
“It just that….” She said sniffling. “…..I love you very much, and didn’t want it to end like this, but it had to. I tried every possible thing to make you hate me as we were breaking up, that would have made things easier, but I failed, I failed miserably. The last thing I wanted to tell you was how much I’ve loved you, but now, look at me, I made a mess out of myself.”
My jaw dropped as I blinked twice in disbelief. I clearly didn’t see it coming.
“My only request is….” She wiped her tears. “Don’t smoke too much; I know how vulnerable you are during such situations, this will soon end, and you’d be fine within a week.” She kissed me gently.
“I want to see you in America soon”

 
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Posted on 03-29-12 3:01 PM     [Snapshot: 404]     Reply [Subscribe]
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@behoove_me: You penned/nailed it. Good Job!


 
Posted on 03-29-12 6:42 PM     [Snapshot: 577]     Reply [Subscribe]
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 wow, it alwaz a gr8 read behoove, specially the twists u have @ the end.... mind blowing.. feels refreshing after such a long day.. well done!
 
Posted on 03-29-12 7:01 PM     [Snapshot: 625]     Reply [Subscribe]
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 yet another great piece from Behoove ! 
 
Posted on 03-29-12 9:36 PM     [Snapshot: 770]     Reply [Subscribe]
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 U nailed it mate!! after a long time got something worth to spend few minutes at Sajha...keep coming
 
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Appreciate that everyone!
Once again, I am indebted to you guys for taking time to read through this fiction of mine. But like I had mentioned during my previous post, I wish I could’ve had that ability to write something nicer, something better or an awe inspiring read that sharply deviates from the routine stories I have been posting so far. As I write more, I realize I have limitations and very little room to improvise, maybe I am not as educated enough to write a better story.
Also, one of the big flaws in my writing is, I write as my mood strikes and post in haste. I do not edit and I do not think about restructuring the sentences. It could be a quick, good read, but not great by any means. Like 28 amendments pointed it out, I could have ended the story just at the point he mentioned, but I went ahead and dramatized it a little more. My bad. ‘That’ is the flaw I am speaking of; I guess I always need a fresh pair of eyes to read through my stories before I post it quickly.
Hopefully, someday I shall learn to write a little better and not worry about the flaws anymore.

 
Posted on 03-30-12 10:23 AM     [Snapshot: 1064]     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nice one Behoove.
I like your stories but I don't like you always stating that you have flaws, this and that in your comments.


 
Posted on 03-30-12 1:57 PM     [Snapshot: 1160]     Reply [Subscribe]
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sorry if my comment made you feel like you are not a good writer. That was not my intention. But when u post a story in a platform like sajha, you should have thought about its users and presumed that we have an ability to grasp the inferred idea(except few exceptionally intellegent people :) ). When you gave us that extra detail after "NOTHING", you made us reader feel like a dumbass. i felt like you gave that detail because you thouhght i had no idea what was going on in her mind, why did she hugged him so tight before getting off of the motorbike and why was she crying. you had a perfect hollywood romantic drama going on until "NOTHING" but it came out as a silly bollywood flick at the end.

 
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Ranipari,
Thanks for visiting, it really means a lot to me when you choose to read not only the story but also my comment. But in all honesty, I need to improvise, and that is what I am telling to ‘myself’, not to others. Each time I post something in sajha, I find numerous flaws when I read it again, and that is my frustration, nothing else.
28th Amendment,
I read my reply once again and felt a little bad about it. It sounded more like sarcasm when it was actually not. I am honestly very thankful that you pointed out few redundant details I could have done without. And I sincerely wish everyone did so too. So thank you from the bottom of my heart. I seek such inputs from readers every time I post something. And no, I wasn’t thinking about stopping at the point when she gets off the bike, quite honestly I would have stopped it right there if I had been a little careful. Majority of the readers in sajha are mature enough to understand what is implied. However, I still want to reiterate my haste to post and a little eccentricity I seriously need to work on.

 
Posted on 03-30-12 4:10 PM     [Snapshot: 1301]     Reply [Subscribe]
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Awesome!!!!!! Just love all your writings!!!!!!!

 
Posted on 03-31-12 1:27 AM     [Snapshot: 1483]     Reply [Subscribe]
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like in real life.

great writing .

 
Posted on 03-31-12 1:48 AM     [Snapshot: 1490]     Reply [Subscribe]
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You write like a pro brother. How come you write such good stories and just post it on Sajha? I think you deserve monetary reward getting them published in newspapers and magazines. May be you can compile them and publish it. If Samrat Upadhyaya does that, why can't you? I read it and found it as great as Samrat's short stories. Great! I loved it.
 
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i don't know anything about anyone but its a perfect one for me keep uploading some more..............Thank you for posting such a wonderful ................................
 
Posted on 04-02-12 11:12 AM     [Snapshot: 1823]     Reply [Subscribe]
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हैन हो यो कथा मा अम्रिच आएर भेट भयो कि क्यर्यो होला खै ??? अर्को भाग औना बाकी हो कि कसो होला ?
कथा रर्मो छ
 
Posted on 04-02-12 11:31 AM     [Snapshot: 1837]     Reply [Subscribe]
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Awesome!!!!!! 

कहिले काहीं सोच्छु , कहिले लेख्न सक्ने/सिक्ने  होला यस्तो कथा .

 
Posted on 04-02-12 1:10 PM     [Snapshot: 1964]     Reply [Subscribe]
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 Awesome stuff. Behoove_Me dai, just lay it out and let us be critics. No need for such humility ;) 
 
Posted on 04-02-12 3:04 PM     [Snapshot: 2017]     Reply [Subscribe]
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 Excellent read.
 
Posted on 04-02-12 3:21 PM     [Snapshot: 2029]     Reply [Subscribe]
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 God damn it man.

I swear someone is cutting onions in here cuz somehow there's tears in my eyes.

Waiting for the next part. 

Epic writing. 

 
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Love it. Looking forward more from you. You are a good writer.
 
Posted on 04-02-12 9:36 PM     [Snapshot: 2179]     Reply [Subscribe]
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Behoove Me,

I agree with one of the other commentators about the need to show some backbone and gumption. It's one thing to be open to suggestions but quite another to sound like you are  bowled over by every one of them that comes your way. When you yourself start pointing out your many flaws, you invite skepticism and doubt from your readers. 

That said, I do wish there were more people like you on Sajha who shared their creativity with others. Thanks for livening up the place and all the best with your creative endeavors.

Last edited: 02-Apr-12 09:43 PM

 
Posted on 04-06-12 4:06 PM     [Snapshot: 2384]     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nice! I like the ending just the way it is. It would be easier for us to dislike Sheetal if you had not put the part about her still having feelings for you. If it is a true, I am sorry, if it is not, enjoyed the read.
 



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