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 भ्यालेन्टाईन डे गजल
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Posted on 02-14-10 2:51 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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तिमीले ल्यायौ कस्ता रसिक लहरहरु !
कटान हुंदा पनि रमेका बगरहरु !

तहल्का मार्दै डुल्छौ स्बर्गका शहरहरु
पृथ्वीमा ब्यर्थै बाँचें भन्दैछ अमरहरु !

गलत पुष्टी भए तापनि खबरहरु
तैपनि दुख्नु कस्तो सबल असरहरु ?

पाउमा कष्ट होला छुन ति सगरहरु 
ओर्लन राजी भए अग्ला ति शिखरहरु !

खोज्दैछौ मेरो जस्तै देखिने अधरहरु
अधुरा ठान्दो हौ म बिनाका सफरहरु !

जंहा नि तिमी देख्छ पागल नजरहरु
सल्बलि उठे खाँदी राखेका रहरहरु !

 
Posted on 02-14-10 5:19 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Valentine day::: The day when chances of getting laid is extremely high!!!


 


  love these kinds of day


will buy plenty of roses if i need too.


 
Posted on 02-20-10 11:06 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Posted on 02-21-10 4:00 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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O Ho!

Aman re? Kun chai Aman ho? Maile chineko Sweety Aman ho ki?

:)

 
Posted on 02-21-10 10:28 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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significant change:

तिमीले ल्यायौ कस्ता रसिक लहरहरु !
कटान हुंदा पनि रमेका बगरहरु !

नहुंदा तिमी कुनै स्वप्निल शहर हुन्न
सपना ब्यर्थै देखें भन्दैछन् नजरहरु !

म हटें तर अझै खतरा तरेको छैन
बाटोमा भेट्छौ मेरा दुरुष्त कसरहरु !

भासिए तिम्रा लागि अग्ला ति शिखरहरु !
पाउमा पीडा रोक्न गरेका कदरहरु !

गलत पुष्टी भए निस्केका खबर सबै
तैपनि दुखी राख्नु कस्तो हो असरहरु ?

घामले चुमे सरि जमेको बरफलाई
बाफ भै उठे खाँदी राखेका रहरहरु !

छांयामा तिम्रो थप्प हराए भ्रमरहरु 
बासना छर्दै फूल, गर्दैछ सफरहरु ! 

पछाडी फर्की हेर्ने बानीले हैरानी बढ्यो 
अगाडी बढ्न फेरौं तरिका तवरहरु !

 
Posted on 09-26-10 1:56 AM     [Snapshot: 801]     Reply [Subscribe]
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Well Crafted! Alteration seems compromising. First (of this page) have precious and carefully chosen language, which is "SOUL" of ghazal.
Jay Hosh!

 
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सबै मित्र लाई नमस्कार ।
 
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  Shirish जि को "भ्यालेन्टाईन डे गजल".... नाम नै दमदार छ, चमकदार छ ।  "गजल" धेरैनै राम्रो छ ।



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Shirish जि लाई पाठकको सुझाव:

#1 Kesto_Manche wrote, "Valentine day::: The day when chances of getting laid is extremely high!!!"
#2 Nepalayan जि wrote,

"Alteration seems compromising"
#3 Simple_KeTa wrote, "Shirish जि निर्णय गर्नुस तपाईको लेख गित हो कि कविता। "

In music alteration, an example of chromaticism, is the use of a
neighboring pitch in the chromatic scale in place of its diatonic
neighbor such as in an altered chord. ...
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alteration

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