BTW, the mention of "scenes" (or takes
) is relevant/appropriate only if/when you're writing(shooting) a play and not while narrating a story.General Narendra who was watching his granddaughter with natural curiosity told his wife,” Hatar gariyo justo cha.”
I don't know if I understood this line correctly. Hatar gariyo for the gunyucholi ceremony? If my limited knowledge about our culture serves me right, the ceremony is held once a girl menstruates for the very first time. there ain't no hatar or delay as such. but you are a girl. you should know it better than me :P
the remaining story is flawless (some occasional grammatical and punctuational slips apart -- but then again, i should not be throwing stones when I myself live in the most fragile of homes :P)...
I liked the way you weaved the plot. very cute, engaging and 'realistic' (despite being a fiction). You are a talented writer! Keep writing!
Nearly missed out on this one. A story well told, Amber. Have always been an ardent fan of your works ever since your Thamel story a year and a half ago...And this one too was extremely captivating and well-told! Its not an easy task to write about emotional scars left behind as a child unless experienced yourself and IMO, you did a brilliant job in explaning that for both characters.
And the cherry-tomato lines? Where did that come from? HAHAHA Some of the lines kept me amused for a bit.
Kudos for a stroy plot that seems as real as it can get. A society where an inter-caste marraige is frowned upon would surely flip out at the holy union of these 2 unassuming individuals.
And the ending to the story is what makes me relish your works: They somehow always end up on a happy note! That just goes to show that you DO believe in fairy-tales.
And yeah, pls do not stop writing! Your hiatus from sajha was missed by this fan here.
BTW, did you atttend the ANA this time around? If so, do you think I know who you are? 
Thanks Sajha_gazer. Those two occurrences in the story are disjoint. The first part was influenced by the scandal in RA in the late 80s.The other incident is related to the common business trend in Nepal during the same time frame. However, I must confess I could not delve into details for some reason. My focus in the story was somewhere else. Btw, just to let you know this reader is still waiting for your "The Frontier Outpost."
Thanks Lootekukur for your " cute" comments.Scenes here should be treated like a sliding window where two or more simultaneous events could be witnessed. In case you are not aware of gunyucholo is mostly done before the actual day. Punctuation and grammar have never been my strong suit. So, I've to say don't expect Wuthering Heights. You mustn't.
Samsara apchong, you've always been there. Thanks! No, I couldn't attend ANA this year, may be next year. And, drinks on me(my hubby) for sure.
Thanks bhankunde_bhut. Exactemento! "someone rightly said that" somewhere.
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